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Talk about the importance of fresh water to life and offer your own solutions to preserve this very valuable natural resource. v.2

Talk about the importance of fresh water to life and offer your own solutions to preserve this very valuable natural resource. v. 2
There is no doubt that water covers up to 70 percent of the earth' s surface, but fresh water accounts for only about 2 percent. Although this amount seems to be extremely small, people cannot live without it. My essay below will clarify how important fresh water is to human life as well as suggest some measures to preserve this precious resource. To commence with, fresh water plays an indispensable part in daily activities. Human can not do anything without fresh water. Cooking needs water, taking shower needs water, doing gardening needs water, too. Besides, people' s body must be always provided enough fresh water since water accounts for more than 70% body' s weight. According to a recent survey, a famous American scientists showed that human being can survive for a week without food but they will die without water for no more than two days. Furthermore, fresh water is home of hundred types of shrimps, crabs and fish of farmers with the hope that they can escape from poverty, stabilize the economy and have a better life. In other words, water helps people balance their material life. The role of fresh water is undeniable so people should work out solutions to preserve this resource. The government ought to support citizens to reuse water of possible so that water is able to be saved for other needy persons. Laws should be introduced to impede people from wasting and contaminating water. It will be better when individuals engage in protecting water campaigns to raise awareness about the importance of this valuable resource. To sum up, fresh water is extremely necessary for daily life so people need to be responsible for preserving the valuable source.
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water
covers up to 70 percent of the
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earth&
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but
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fresh
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water
accounts for
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only
about 2 percent. Although this amount seems to be
extremely
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small
,
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people
cannot
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live
without it. My essay below will clarify how
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important
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fresh
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water
is to human life
as well
as suggest
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some
measures to preserve this precious resource.

To commence with,
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fresh
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water
plays an indispensable part in daily activities. Human can not do anything without
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fresh
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water
. Cooking
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needs
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water
, taking shower
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needs
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water
, doing gardening
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needs
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water
, too.
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,
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people&
#039; s body
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must
be always provided
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enough
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fresh
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water
since
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water
accounts for more than 70%
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body&
#039; s weight. According to a recent survey, a
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famous
American
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scientists
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showed
that human being can survive for a week without food
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but
they will
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die
without
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water
for no more than two days.
Furthermore
,
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fresh
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water
is home of hundred types of shrimps, crabs and fish of farmers with the hope that they can escape from poverty, stabilize the economy and have a better life.
In other words
,
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water
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helps
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people
balance their material life.

The role of
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fresh
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water
is undeniable
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so
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people
should work out solutions to preserve this resource. The
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government
ought to support citizens to reuse
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water
of possible
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so
that
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water
is able to
be saved
for other needy persons. Laws should
be introduced
to impede
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people
from wasting and contaminating
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water
. It will be better when individuals engage in protecting
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water
campaigns to raise awareness about the importance of this valuable resource.

To sum up,
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fresh
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water
is
extremely
necessary for daily life
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so
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people
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need
to be responsible for preserving the valuable source.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic Talk about the importance of fresh water to life and offer your own solutions to preserve this very valuable natural resource. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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