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The table shows information and predictions regarding the change in the percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries. v.1

The table shows information and predictions regarding the change in the percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries. v. 1
The table illustrates the data and predictions about the variation in the proportion of senior citizens who are above the age of 65 in Canada, Germany, and the UK in three years(1988, 2000, 2030). Overall, the population aged 65 will increase at a similar rate in all three countries by 2030. Germany has the highest percentage of people aged 65 in all three years while the UK has the lowest. To begin, Germany had 20. 45% of the population aged 65 in 1988 which is the highest when compared to Canada' s 16. 32% and the UK with 14. 23%. In 2000, Germany' s population comprised of 25. 32% of 65-year-old citizens. Canada had a similar growth reaching 20. 67% in 2000. The UK saw a negligible growth reaching 14. 89% in 2000. By 2030, it is predicted that Germany' s percentage will be 30. 42%. Canada' s proportion of 65-year-old people will be 26. 35% which is high when compared to the UK' s 20. 35% after a predicted growth of nearly 5%.
The table illustrates the data and predictions about the variation in the proportion of senior citizens who are above the age of 65 in Canada, Germany, and the UK in three years(1988, 2000, 2030).

Overall
, the population aged 65 will increase at a similar rate in all three countries by 2030. Germany has the highest percentage of
people
aged 65 in all three years while the UK has the lowest.

To
begin
, Germany had 20. 45% of the population aged 65 in 1988 which is the highest when compared to
Canada&
#039; s 16. 32% and the UK with 14. 23%. In 2000,
Germany&
#039; s population comprised of 25. 32% of 65-year-
old
citizens. Canada had a similar growth reaching 20. 67% in 2000. The UK
saw
a negligible growth reaching 14. 89% in 2000.

By 2030, it
is predicted
that
Germany&
#039; s percentage will be 30. 42%.
Canada&
#039; s proportion of 65-year-
old
people
will be 26. 35% which is high when compared to the
UK&
#039; s 20. 35% after a predicted growth of
nearly
5%.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

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