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he graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v.2

he graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 2
The line graph illustrates changes in the proportion of population aged years and over in USA, Sweden and Japan Between 1940 to 2040 and is measured in percent. Overall it is immediately apparent that Japan the figure of resident up 65 years will probably significant increased in the last year and the amount should become the highest. Despite violent fluctuations both USA and Sweden the weakest of value have been observed in USA and following by Sweden. Population of more 65 ages since 1940 to 1980 between USA and Sweden, there have similar pattern of around 14 - 15 percent. But over following 40 years, population remained roughly unchanged in USA round 14 %. But in Sweden, Population of humans increased fluctuation. Then, Japan Country stood at 5% in 1940 and from 1960 to 1980 total of population stay constant. In 2000 witnessed a gradual rise in the number of population aged. Moving in 2020 and 2040, the figure of USA and Sweden should predicted to increase and growth under 25% and which Japan forecasts show than the amount will reached a high of 27%.
The line graph illustrates
changes
in the proportion of
population
aged years and over
in USA
, Sweden and
Japan
Between 1940 to 2040
and
is measured
in percent.
Overall
it is immediately apparent that
Japan
the figure of resident up 65 years will
probably
significant increased in the last
year
and the amount should become the highest. Despite violent fluctuations both USA and Sweden the weakest of value have
been observed
in USA
and following by Sweden.

Population of more 65 ages since 1940 to 1980
between USA
and Sweden, there have similar pattern of around
14 - 15
percent.
But
over following 40 years,
population
remained roughly unchanged in USA round 14 %.
But
in Sweden,
Population
of humans increased fluctuation. Then,
Japan
Country stood at 5% in 1940 and from 1960 to 1980 total of
population
stay constant. In 2000 witnessed a gradual rise in the number of
population
aged.

Moving in 2020 and 2040, the figure
of USA
and Sweden should
predicted
to increase and growth under 25% and which
Japan
forecasts
show
than the amount will
reached
a high of 27%.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS academic he graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 2

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