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The given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000. v.2

The given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000. v. 2
The given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000. Overall, the total violent crime rate was always higher than other kinds of violent crime level while the proportion of arrests for violent crime stood the lowest point. Over the first 10 years starting from 1978, there was a slight fluctuation in the all violent crimes in America. Whereas, the next 12 years witnessed a steady decrease in the rate of violent crime. It can be seen that from 1978 to 1988 there was a fluctuation between 3. 5 and 4. 5 offences in total violent crime. At the same period, victimisations reported to police rose and fell at a lower rate between 2 and 2. 5 offences, while crimes recorded by police experienced a gradual upward trend and reached the highest point at over 1. 5 offences in a thousand. And the proportion of arrests for violent crime levelled off at a lower rate, under 0. 5 thousand offences. From 1988 onward, the total violent crime rate dramatically declined and stood at nearly 3 offences in thousand, was 3 offences higher than the figure for arrests for violent crime. Victimisations reported to police decreased by around 0. 5 offences between 1988 and 2000, while crimes recorded by police also fell at under 1. 5 offences after standing at the highest rate in 1994.
The
given
chart illustrates the level of serious
violent
crime
namely
rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000.

Overall
, the total
violent
crime
rate
was always higher than other kinds of
violent
crime
level while the proportion of arrests for
violent
crime
stood the lowest point. Over the
first
10 years starting from 1978, there was a slight fluctuation in the all
violent
crimes
in America.
Whereas
, the
next
12 years witnessed a steady decrease in the
rate
of
violent
crime.

It can be
seen
that from 1978 to 1988 there was a fluctuation between 3. 5 and 4. 5
offences
in total
violent
crime
. At the same period,
victimisations
reported to
police
rose and fell at a lower
rate
between 2 and 2. 5
offences
, while
crimes
recorded by
police
experienced a gradual upward trend and reached the highest point at over 1. 5
offences
in a thousand. And the proportion of arrests for
violent
crime
levelled off at a lower
rate
, under 0. 5 thousand
offences
.

From 1988 onward, the total
violent
crime
rate
dramatically
declined and stood at
nearly
3
offences
in
thousand
, was 3
offences
higher than the figure for arrests for
violent
crime
.
Victimisations
reported to
police
decreased by around 0. 5
offences
between 1988 and 2000, while
crimes
recorded by
police
also
fell at under 1. 5
offences
after standing at the highest
rate
in 1994.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS academic The given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000. v. 2

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235 words
6.0
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