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Describe a vehicle you would like to own. v.1

Describe a vehicle you would like to own. v. 1
Describe a vehicle you would like to own. You should say: what type of vehicle it is how it will help you when you are going to buy it and explain why you would like to own this vehicle. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: After our old car has started giving frequent troubles lately, I and my family have finally agreed in principle that it is time to buy a new car. Of course, we are still arguing about what type of car to buy this time, but I am opting for a 4-door Sedan. The car, I would like to own, is a black and shiny Toyota Corolla. It is an 1800 cc, 4-cylinder, 3200 horsepower and automatic transmission car. Offering a seating capacity of 5 passengers, the seats in this car are fully made of leather. Offering a cruise controlling option, this particular car also has a safety airbag, attached to its steering wheel, in order to ensure maximum safety. This sleek and stylish car has great mileage, offering about 30 miles per gallon when driving in the city. Once I buy this car, it will not only help me save my time when travelling to and from my work but also can carry my whole family to different places at their convenience. Besides, this car would allow me to take care of important house choirs, like carrying groceries in bulk or carrying other household things. Besides, it would also help me ease my tension in a great deal when I visit to see my old grandparents in another city, which is quite far from where I live. In fact, visiting my old grandparents is one of the main reason for which I would like to own this vehicle, as our old car gives us a lot of trouble when travelling a long distance. Anyway, I wish, I could buy this vehicle today, but I will have to wait until next year to get it because of some financial issues. Anyway, I want to own this vehicle, mainly because it is affordable, and it has many great features, like great mileage, and other advanced technologies. Besides, this is a spacious enough car where my entire family can fit in rather comfortably. Finally, I want to own this vehicle also because it is very reliable and comes with a great engine.
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Describe
a
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vehicle
you would like to
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own
. You should say: what type of
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vehicle
it is how it will
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help
you when you are going to
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buy
it and
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explain
why you would like to
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own
this
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vehicle
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer: After our
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old
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car
has
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started
giving frequent troubles lately, I and my family have
finally
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agreed
in principle that it is time to
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buy
a new
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car
.
Of course
, we are
still
arguing about what type of
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car
to
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buy
this time,
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but
I am opting for a 4-door Sedan.

The
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car
, I would like to
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own
, is a black and shiny Toyota Corolla. It is an 1800 cc, 4-cylinder, 3200 horsepower and automatic transmission
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car
. Offering a seating capacity of 5 passengers, the seats in this
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car
are
fully
made of leather. Offering a cruise controlling option, this particular
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car
also
has a safety airbag, attached to its steering wheel, in order to ensure maximum safety.

This sleek and stylish
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car
has
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great
mileage, offering about
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30 miles
per gallon when driving in the city. Once I
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buy
this
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car
, it will not
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only
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help
me save my time when travelling to and from my work
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but
also
can carry my whole family to
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different
places at their convenience.
Besides
, this
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car
would
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allow
me to take care of
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important
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house
choirs, like carrying groceries in bulk or carrying other household things.
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Besides
, it would
also
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help
me
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ease
my tension in a
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great
deal when I visit to
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see
my
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old
grandparents in another city, which is quite far from where I
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live
. In fact, visiting my
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old
grandparents is one of the main reason for which I would like to
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own
this
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vehicle
, as our
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old
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car
gives us
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a lot of
trouble when travelling a long distance.

Anyway
, I wish, I could
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buy
this
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vehicle
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today
,
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but
I will
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have to
wait until
next
year to
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get
it
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because
of
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some
financial issues.

Anyway
, I want to
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own
this
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vehicle
,
mainly
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because
it is affordable, and it has
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many
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great
features, like
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great
mileage, and other advanced technologies.
Besides
, this is a spacious
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enough
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car
where my entire family can fit in
rather
comfortably
.
Finally
, I want to
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own
this
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vehicle
also
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because
it is
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very
reliable and
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comes
with a
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great
engine.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a vehicle you would like to own. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
428 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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