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You're interested in a music course that you saw on the advertisment wrote a letter to the club explain why You're interested request more information about thus course talk about your past experience.

You're interested in a music course that you saw on the advertisment wrote a letter to the club explain why You're interested request more information about thus course talk about your past experience. 7pra5
Dear sir, Recently, I saw a advertisement in your Oxford newspaper which is related to music event I really want to participate in this course infact last year I also had joined it anyway I would ask some detail realted to this concert in this letter. Let me tell you why I excited for it. firstly, music is my passion I do not only like to sing a song I also enjoy to listen to music however, I want to set up my career 8n this field I know if person sing a song extremely better way consequently they easily germs nane and fame within small time what is more I like to sing song sing my childhood in fact I was participating in many music concerts during my school day although I also won this concert. Moreover, please tell me me details about this music concert such as when it will be start and what would be fees of it as well as which form will be fill for jion this concert to candidate. Lest years I also partispted in it if I tell about the pervious experience ot was supermly good all staff of there was immensely cooperative in the light of the fact that I had learnt plethora of things from it so that's why I want to join again it. I look forward to waiting from your answer. You sincerely,
Dear sir,

Recently, I
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advertisement in your Oxford newspaper which
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music
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event
I
really
want to participate in this course
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infact
last year I
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joined
it anyway I would ask
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some
detail
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to this
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concert
in this letter.

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me
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tell
you why I excited for it.
firstly
,
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music
is my passion I do not
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only
like to
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sing
a song I
also
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enjoy to listen
to
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music
however
, I want to set up my career 8n this field I know if person
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sing
a song
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extremely better
way
consequently
they
easily
germs
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nane
and fame within
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small time
what is more
I like to
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sing song
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sing
my childhood in fact I was participating in
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many
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music
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concerts
during my school day although I
also
won this concert.

Moreover
,
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tell
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me me
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details
about this
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music
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concert
such as when it will be
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start
and what would be fees of it
as well
as which form will be fill for
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jion
this
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concert
to candidate.

Lest years I
also
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partispted
in it if I
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about the
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pervious
experience
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ot
was
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supermly
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all staff of there was
immensely
cooperative in the light of the fact that I had
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learnt
plethora of things from it
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so
that's why I want to
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join
again it. I look forward to waiting from your answer. You
sincerely
,
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IELTS letter You're interested in a music course that you saw on the advertisment wrote a letter to the club explain why You're interested request more information about thus course talk about your past experience.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
234 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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