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your sister has been in the hospital for a week. during this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her very poor quality. write an email to the hospital manager and include the following things:tell him/her what you have seen in the past week. complain about the food quality. offer a suggestion on how things could improve.

your sister has been in the hospital for a week. during this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her very poor quality. write an email to the hospital manager and include the following things: tell him/her what you have seen in the past week. complain about the food quality. offer a suggestion on how things could improve. VlX6J
Dear hospital manager, I am Kaushal. My sister pragati has been hospitalized for a week. When I have visited 2 days ago, she was eating a burger. That is available outside on the streets. I know that those guys make food for people today and they use that food the next day. Just because of this I never eat outside. I am writing this letter to you just because of the food quality. It might be affected to our health. My sister is just being recovered last day. And a couple of days ago I have seen her eat a burger and it was completely unfresh. As she is patient your staffs must care for her. Due to reckless she might have chances to unconscienced. For the suggestion, I could give that you eighter allow the people to bring food from their home for the relatives or make quality food for patients. As a result, they will be recovered as soon as possible and they will be grateful to you. Thank you. Her brother kaushal
Dear hospital manager,

I am
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Kaushal
. My sister
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pragati
has
been hospitalized
for a week. When I have visited 2 days ago, she was eating a burger.
That is
available outside on the streets. I know that those guys
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make
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food
for
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people
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today and
they
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use
that
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food
the
next
day.
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Just
because of this
I never eat outside.

I am writing this letter to you
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just
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because
of the
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food
quality. It might be
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affected
to our health. My sister is
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just
being recovered
last day. And a couple of days ago I have
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seen
her eat a burger and it was completely
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unfresh
. As she is patient your staffs
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must
care for her. Due to reckless she might have chances to
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unconscienced
.

For the suggestion, I could give that
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you eighter
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allow
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to bring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
from their home for the relatives or
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make
quality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
for patients.
As a result
, they will
be recovered
as
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soon
as
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
possible and
they will be grateful to you. Thank you.

Her brother

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kaushal
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IELTS letter your sister has been in the hospital for a week. during this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her very poor quality. write an email to the hospital manager and include the following things: tell him/her what you have seen in the past week. complain about the food quality. offer a suggestion on how things could improve.

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