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your sister has been in the hospital for a week. during this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her very poor quality. write an email to the hospital manager and include the following things:tell him/her what you have seen in the past week. complain about the food quality. offer a suggestion on how things could improve.

your sister has been in the hospital for a week. during this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her very poor quality. write an email to the hospital manager and include the following things: tell him/her what you have seen in the past week. complain about the food quality. offer a suggestion on how things could improve. VlX6J
Dear hospital manager, I am Kaushal. My sister pragati has been hospitalized for a week. When I have visited 2 days ago, she was eating a burger. That is available outside on the streets. I know that those guys make food for people today and they use that food the next day. Just because of this I never eat outside. I am writing this letter to you just because of the food quality. It might be affected to our health. My sister is just being recovered last day. And a couple of days ago I have seen her eat a burger and it was completely unfresh. As she is patient your staffs must care for her. Due to reckless she might have chances to unconscienced. For the suggestion, I could give that you eighter allow the people to bring food from their home for the relatives or make quality food for patients. As a result, they will be recovered as soon as possible and they will be grateful to you. Thank you. Her brother kaushal
Dear hospital manager,

I am
Kaushal
. My sister
pragati
has
been hospitalized
for a week. When I have visited 2 days ago, she was eating a burger.
That is
available outside on the streets. I know that those guys
make
food
for
people
today and
they
use
that
food
the
next
day.
Just
because of this
I never eat outside.

I am writing this letter to you
just
because
of the
food
quality. It might be
affected
to our health. My sister is
just
being recovered
last day. And a couple of days ago I have
seen
her eat a burger and it was completely
unfresh
. As she is patient your staffs
must
care for her. Due to reckless she might have chances to
unconscienced
.

For the suggestion, I could give that
you eighter
allow
the
people
to bring
food
from their home for the relatives or
make
quality
food
for patients.
As a result
, they will
be recovered
as
soon
as
possible and
they will be grateful to you. Thank you.

Her brother

kaushal
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IELTS letter your sister has been in the hospital for a week. during this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her very poor quality. write an email to the hospital manager and include the following things: tell him/her what you have seen in the past week. complain about the food quality. offer a suggestion on how things could improve.

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  American English
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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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