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Your school budget will allow for an additional class to be offered in the coming school year, and your principal has asked students to make suggestions. Can you think of subjects that you would like to learn or subjects you think need to be taught? Write a letter to the principal convincing him or her to select the class you think would be best. Be sure to support your view with specific reasons and examples.

Your school budget will allow for an additional class to be offered in the coming school year, and your principal has asked students to make suggestions. Can you think of subjects that you would like to learn or subjects you think need to be taught? Write a letter to the principal convincing him or her to select the class you think would be best. Be sure to support your view with specific reasons and examples. 7aNGk
Dear principal, I am a student in the school, and I heard information about the school budget for an additional class for the next coming year. Still, people did not solve the coronavirus problem, and they suggest people stay and work indoor. It also influenced the students, and most of them are doing online classes. It declined the time spent with their friends and worsen their health. Since they are not spending proper hours exercising, I think inserting a PE class can force them to move. With the coronavirus and online classes are disturbing students from going outside, the time spent in the home abnormally intensified. It is causing health problems and especially makes students gain weight. For example, I am not using most of my resting time in going outside but sitting indoors, sleeping, or staring at the screen. From then on, I started to fatten up and be concerned about my fitness. It made me feel the necessity of exercising, but not moving became my habit, so I thought help from school is essential. Furthermore, by inserting a PE course, students can interact with their friends more because the subject requires us to cooperate. Spending time with friends can release their academic stress and refresh their bodies and mental conditions. For instance, when I played dodgeball with my friends after a class that I feel bored of, I revitalize and could attend the next class with higher concentration. It indicates that PE can allow students to deal with their stress and enjoy the day. Nevertheless, some students may think PE can exhaust them and will only reduce their studying time. I agree with the tiresomeness after the PE class because the students have low stamina to exercise and study in one day. However, by constantly using their bodies, the strength will be more sustainable, and they will be able to study longer. Since the studying time increases as they grow up, it is crucial to maintain their health for it. Therefore, PE can even enhance the efficiency of learning. As PE class can have diverse positive influences, I believe adding PE class for the coming year can affect the students to be livelier. With coronavirus prevents the students to move outside, the students’ started to have health problems. Nevertheless, PE can protect the students’ health, refresh their minds, and help them study when time has passed. I hope you consider my idea when deciding which subject to add. Yours truly, Sieun Kim.
Dear principal,

I am a
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student
in the school, and I heard information about the school budget for an additional
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class
for the
next
coming year.
Still
,
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people
did not solve the coronavirus problem, and they suggest
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people
stay and work indoor. It
also
influenced the
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students
, and most of them are doing online
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classes
. It declined the
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time
spent with their
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friends
and worsen their
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health
. Since they are not spending proper hours exercising, I
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think
inserting a PE
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class
can force them to
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move
.

With the coronavirus and online
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classes
are disturbing
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students
from going outside, the
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time
spent in the home
abnormally
intensified. It is causing
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health
problems and
especially
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makes
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students
gain weight.
For example
, I am not using most of my resting
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time
in going outside
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but
sitting indoors, sleeping, or staring at the screen. From then on, I
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started
to fatten up and
be concerned
about my fitness. It made me feel the necessity of exercising,
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but
not moving became my habit,
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so
I
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thought
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help
from school is essential.

Furthermore
, by inserting a PE course,
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students
can interact with their
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friends
more
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because
the subject requires us to cooperate. Spending
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time
with
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friends
can release their academic
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stress
and refresh their bodies and mental conditions.
For instance
, when I played
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dodgeball
with my
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friends
after a
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class
that I feel
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bored of
, I revitalize and could attend the
next
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class
with higher concentration. It indicates that PE can
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allow
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students
to deal with their
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stress
and enjoy the day.

Nevertheless
,
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some
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students
may
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think
PE can exhaust them and will
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only
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reduce
their studying
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time
. I
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agree
with the tiresomeness after the PE
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class
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because
the
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students
have low stamina to exercise and study in one day.
However
, by
constantly
using their bodies, the strength will be more sustainable, and they will be able to study longer. Since the studying
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time
increases as they grow up, it is crucial to maintain their
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health
for it.
Therefore
, PE can even enhance the efficiency of learning.

As PE
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class
can have diverse
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positive
influences, I believe adding PE
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class
for the coming year can affect the
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students
to be livelier. With coronavirus
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prevents
the
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students
to
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move
outside, the
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students’
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started
to have
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health
problems.
Nevertheless
, PE can protect the
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students’
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health
, refresh their minds, and
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help
them study when
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time
has passed. I hope you consider my
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idea
when deciding which subject to
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add
.

Yours
truly
,

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Sieun
Kim.

IELTS letter Your school budget will allow for an additional class to be offered in the coming school year, and your principal has asked students to make suggestions. Can you think of subjects that you would like to learn or subjects you think need to be taught? Write a letter to the principal convincing him or her to select the class you think would be best. Be sure to support your view with specific reasons and examples.

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