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You would like to invite your foreign friend to visit you foryour birthday.

You would like to invite your foreign friend to visit you foryour birthday. qVloa

Dear my friend. How are you? As you know my birthday coming. This is 3rd of March. I decide to organize birthday party and celebrate with my friends. Without my best friend my birthday is going to be really incomplete. I am going to celebrate at home. We shall have a dance and play any games. The party will be from 7 to 12 pm. I am inviting you in advance so that you can prepare yourself and take permission to come to our home for that day. I am planning to decorate the house with balloons and ribbons. I think colorful colors will give a good mood all night long. I also wanted everyone to put on mysterious costumes, like in childhood, but we are no longer small. I will be very pleased if you can join us for the occasion. I am looking forward to your company. Your presence will make the occasion even more cherished for me. I hope you will accept my invitation.

Dear my friend.

How are you? “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 you know my birthday coming. This is 3rd of March. I decide to organize birthday party and celebrate with my friends. Without my best friend my birthday is going to be really
 incomplete. I am going to celebrate at home. We shall have a dance and play any games. The party will be from 7 to 12 pm. I am inviting you in advance This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that you can prepare yourself and take permission to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to our home for that day. I am planning to decorate the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 with balloons and ribbons. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 colorful colors will give a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 mood all night long. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
also
 wanted everyone to put on mysterious costumes, like in childhood, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 we are no longer This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 will be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfied
pleased
 if you can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatefuse
join
 us for the occasion. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am looking forward to your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
. Your presence will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 the occasion even more cherished for me.

I hope you will accept my invitation. 