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Your pen friend has written you a letter asking for advice on how to improve his her eating habits and get fit. Write a letter offering advice

Your pen friend has written you a letter asking for advice on how to improve his her eating habits and get fit. Write a letter offering advice 8d7Xm
Dear Isabel How are you? How is it going? I am fine thank you extremely much. You asked me for advice. I am writing to give for advice. I will tell you about proper nutrition. The human body gets minerals from food. There are a lot of useful minerals in food. For proper nutrition we need do not never eat unhealthy foods. Also, you necessary less eat meat because consume too much meat bring to obesity. Obesity appears as a result a lot of oil foods. Instead, we should to eat useful products. For example: vegetable dishes, fish, eggs and liquid foods. This foods useful for you. I advice you eat this foods more. You will be healthy if you consume this food more. Organism demands eat 5 times. Later, I advice you engage regular sports. Engage with sports is very good. A man engaged in sports never be ill. Always will be healthy. I am going to swim too. I just love to swim but I play all kinds of the sports, even though. My family love to do sports too. I hope you follow my advice. I look forward to hearing from you. Write faster. I miss you so much. Lots of love Merry
Dear Isabel

How are you? How is it going? I am fine thank you
extremely
much. You asked me for
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advice
. I am writing to give for
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advice
. I will
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tell
you about proper nutrition. The human body
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gets
minerals from
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food
. There are
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a lot of
useful minerals in
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food
. For proper nutrition we need do
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not never
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eat
unhealthy
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foods
.
Also
, you necessary less
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eat
meat
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because
consume too much meat bring to obesity. Obesity appears
as a result
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a lot of
oil
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foods
.
Instead
, we should to
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eat
useful products.
For example
: vegetable dishes, fish, eggs and liquid
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foods
. This
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foods
useful for you. I
Did you mean "advise" (verb) instead of advice (noun)?
advice
you
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eat
Did you mean "these"?
this
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foods
more. You will be healthy if you consume this
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food
more. Organism demands
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eat
5 times. Later, I
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advice
you engage regular
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sports
. Engage with
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sports
is
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very
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good
. A
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man
engaged in
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sports
never be ill. Always will be healthy. I am going to swim too. I
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just
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love
to swim
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but
I play all kinds of the
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sports
,
even though
. My family
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love
to do
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sports
too. I hope you follow my
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advice
. I look forward to hearing from you. Write faster. I miss you
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so
much.

Lots of
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love


Merry
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IELTS letter Your pen friend has written you a letter asking for advice on how to improve his her eating habits and get fit. Write a letter offering advice

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
205 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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