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Your parents have both retired and they are now living in a city far away from where you work. You decided to find a job in that city so that you can look after them. Write to a company to apply for a job that is suitable for you. You should write at least 150 words.

Your parents have both retired and they are now living in a city far away from where you work. You decided to find a job in that city so that you can look after them. Write to a company to apply for a job that is suitable for you. 115AX
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to apply for the position of salesman advertised on your company website. Your esteemed company is looking for an experienced, qualified and conscientious contributor that I should be a suitable one. My name is Bill Gate. I am a graduate of Ho Chi Minh City Marketing University and currently work as a salesman at Facebook. I have been working in the marketing field for five years. My advantage is to know many clients and my connection built with them would help your company a lot. The only reason for me to leave my current job is that my parents have both retired and they are now living in the city far from where I am working now. Therefore, I decided to apply to your firm so that I can look after them. I would certainly be interested in hearing from you and wish to have an appointment for an interview. For your convince, I have enclosed my resume. Looking forward to receiving your reply. Regards,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to apply for the position of salesman advertised on your
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company
website. Your esteemed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is looking for an experienced, qualified and conscientious contributor that I should be a suitable one.

My name is Bill Gate. I am a graduate of Ho Chi Minh City Marketing University and
currently
work as a salesman at Facebook.

I have been working in the marketing field for five years. My advantage is to know
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many
clients and my connection built with them would
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help
your
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company
a lot.

The
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only
reason for me to
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leave
my
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current
job is that my parents have both
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retired and
they are
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now
living in the city far from where I am working
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now
.
Therefore
, I decided to apply to your firm
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so
that I can look after them.

I would
certainly
be interested
in hearing from you and wish to have an appointment for an interview. For your convince, I have enclosed my resume.

Looking forward to receiving your reply.

Regards,

IELTS letter Your parents have both retired and they are now living in a city far away from where you work. You decided to find a job in that city so that you can look after them. Write to a company to apply for a job that is suitable for you.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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