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your parents are both retired and modern number 11 city watching you work you decide to find a job in the city to take care of them

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Dear Mr. Ronal I would like to apply for the position of receptionist advertised. My name is Nguyen Phuong. I'm working as a receptionist at a hotel in Tokyo. I have been doing this job for 3 years, and is always considered a talent employee with flying colours. Now I want to apply to the company to work. The main reason comes from my family problems, my parent retired, I wanted to take care of them conveniently, so I moved here. With 3 years of experience I'm confident with my abilities. I have good communication skills, I know how to handle unexpected situations with a positive attitude. That brought to me title of '' Outstanding Employee of the Year '' in the for 3 consecutive years. If I have chance to work for you, I will become an excellent receptionist in your company and help it grow more and more. Please consider my background to know more about my academic level and skill. I look forward to an interview from you to be able to speech in more detail and accurately more. I hope I can get your message soon. And wish you have a nice day
Dear Mr.
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Ronal


I would like to apply for the position of receptionist advertised.

My name is Nguyen
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Phuong
. I'm working as a receptionist at a hotel in Tokyo. I have been doing this job for 3 years, and is always considered a talent employee with flying
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colours
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I want to apply to the
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to work. The main reason
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from my family problems, my parent retired, I wanted to take care of them
conveniently
,
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so
I
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moved
here.

With 3 years of experience I'm confident with my abilities. I have
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good
communication
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skills
, I know how to handle unexpected situations with a
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positive
attitude. That brought to me title of '' Outstanding Employee of the
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Year
'' in the for 3 consecutive years. If I have chance to work for you, I will become an excellent receptionist in your
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company
and
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help
it grow more and more.

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Please
consider my background to know more about my academic level and
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skill
. I look forward to an interview from you to be able to speech in more detail and
accurately
more.

I hope I can
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get
your message
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soon
. And wish you have a nice
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day
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IELTS letter your parents are both retired and modern number 11 city watching you work you decide to find a job in the city to take care of them

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  American English
5 paragraphs
196 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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