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A PRESENT THAT I RECEIVED FROM MY PARENTS FOR MY MATRICULATION EXAM RESULT

A PRESENT THAT I RECEIVED FROM MY PARENTS FOR MY MATRICULATION EXAM RESULT 6aDMG

I am writing this letter because I want to share a piece of good news with you. I have passed the matriculation exam with three distinctions, Mathematics, Chemistry, and Biology. I didn't get the result as much as I expected but I am really satisfied with my results. During this pandemic period, I am attending online classes to improve my skills in education. This means I have to spend most of my time on screen so the laptop becomes a necessary thing so that I may feel more comfortable than staring at the phone screen. As I am a student and could not afford such a demanding price, I just used my father's old laptop. As it was a second-handed laptop, I encountered a lot of technical problems while I was studying and attending classes. After using this second-handed laptop for some months, I received a new laptop that my parents gave me as a present for my matriculation exam results. It is "ASUS VivoBook" which I had always wanted. It is dark blue colour which is one of my most favourite colours. I was not expected for that present, but my parents surprised me with that valuable present.

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 news with you. I have passed the matriculation exam with three distinctions, Mathematics, Chemistry, and Biology. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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