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your next door neighbor likes to listen late at night, because of the loud music you often lose sleep

your next door neighbor likes to listen late at night, because of the loud music you often lose sleep Ed22M
Dear Jack Hi Jack, this is your next door neighbor Jason. I’ve have a minor problem which I wanted to discuss with you, I’ve know you are in passion with hip hop music. I love music myself and it often could soothing my motion and relax while I’m stressed out, however recently you have been play music very loud late at night during bedtime which causing me having insomnia. Moreover I could have a hard time concentrating at work the next day, in short could you kindly lower the volume down much appreciated for your kind courtesy.
Dear Jack

Hi Jack, this is your
next
door neighbor Jason.
Did you mean "I have"?
I’ve have
a minor problem which I wanted to discuss with you,
Did you mean "I’ve known"?
I’ve know
you are in passion with hip hop music. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
music myself and it
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often
could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "soothe"
soothing
my motion and relax while I’m
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stressed
out,
however
recently you have been play music
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very
loud late at night during bedtime which causing me having insomnia.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Moreover
I could have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
time concentrating at work the
next
day, in short could you kindly lower the volume down much appreciated for your kind courtesy.
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IELTS letter your next door neighbor likes to listen late at night, because of the loud music you often lose sleep

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  American English
2 paragraphs
97 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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