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Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this. v.2

Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this. v. 2
Dear Mr and Mrs Hagel, Hope this letter finds you in good health and spirit. I am sorry that it has come to this, but I had no other choice but to write this letter to you. In fact, we have a situation with your dog here which keeps barking at night just when I try hard to go to sleep after a long and tiring day at work. Now, please don’t get me wrong as I really have nothing against dogs. In fact, I like spending time with a good and friendly dog. But, as for your dog, I am having a hard time to deal with its noise. By the way, it is really important for me to have a good sleep because if I don’t, it becomes difficult for me to perform well at the hospital where I have to treat elderly people. So, I think, I have got my point across. So, I would like to request you to spend some more time with the dog and train him better or alternatively, take him to a pet hospital to do something about his abrupt barking at night. But, if that doesn’t work, please try to take it to another room so that I can take some sleep at night. Yours sincerely, Freddie John
Dear Mr and Mrs
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Hagel
,

Hope this letter finds you in
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good
health and spirit. I am sorry that it has
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come
to this,
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but
I had no other choice
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but
to write this letter to you. In fact, we have a situation with your
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dog
here which
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keeps
barking at night
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just
when I try
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hard
to go to sleep after a long and tiring day at work.
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Now
,
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please
don’t
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get
me
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wrong
as I
really
have nothing against
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dogs
. In fact, I like spending time with a
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good
and friendly
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dog
.
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But
, as for your
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dog
, I am having a
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hard
time to deal with its noise.

By the way, it is
really
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important
for me to have a
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good
sleep
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because
if I don’t, it becomes difficult for me to perform well at the hospital where I
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have to
treat elderly
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people
.

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So
, I
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think
, I have
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got
my point across.
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So
, I would like to request you to spend
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some
more time with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dog
and train him better or
alternatively
, take him to a pet hospital to do something about his abrupt barking at night.
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But
, if that doesn’t work,
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please
try to take it to another room
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so
that I can take
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some
sleep at night.

Yours
sincerely
,

Freddie John
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
216 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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