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Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this. v.3

Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this. v. 3
I am Beth Scarlet, your next-door neighbour, writing to express my concern about the noise your dog makes at night. I intended to write to you a few days ago but waited patiently with the hope that the dog would stop barking loudly at night and will save me from writing a letter that sounds like a complaint letter. I am hoping that you would resolve the issue. For more than a week your dog has been yelping aloud at night and I have no idea why! Just when I send my daughter to her bed, who is a school-goer and try to close my eyes, I can hear the deafening noise and this deters me from falling asleep. I have to get up before 6. 00 am to prepare breakfast for my family, then take my daughter to her school and finally drive to my office. Interrupted sleep or lack of sound sleep leaves me dizzy the next day and this hurts my performance in my office. You are great neighbours in every aspect and I am sure you will feel my stress regarding this. I do not own a pet and cannot advise you what should be done but I guess taking the dog to a specialist might be a good idea. Yours sincerely, Beth Scarlet
I am Beth Scarlet, your
next
-door
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neighbour
, writing to express my concern about the noise your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dog
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makes
at night. I intended to write to you a few days ago
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but
waited
patiently
with the hope that the
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dog
would
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stop
barking
loudly
at night and will save me from writing a letter that sounds like a complaint letter.
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I
am hoping that you would resolve the issue.

For more than a week your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dog
has been yelping aloud at night and I have no
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idea
why!
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Just
when I
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send
my daughter to her bed, who is a school-goer and try to close my eyes, I can hear the deafening noise and this deters me from falling asleep. I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
up
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before
6. 00 am to prepare breakfast for my family, then take my daughter to her school and
finally
drive to my office. Interrupted sleep or lack of sound sleep
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leaves
me dizzy the
next
day and this hurts my performance in my office.

You are great
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neighbours
in every
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aspect and
I am sure you will feel my
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stress
regarding this. I do not
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own
a pet and cannot advise you what should
be done
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I guess taking the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dog
to a specialist might be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Beth Scarlet
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this. v. 3

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
217 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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