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You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. v.2

You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. v. 2
Dear Johnson, Hope all is well at your end. I am writing this letter to you because I have some furniture to sell, and I would rather have you buy them instead of some complete strangers. I am trying to sell some furniture because I am planning to move to another city for professional reason. I just don’t want to carry them all the way to that city because carrying them that far would most probably damage them. So, I thought that it would be a good idea to let you know about the furniture before I sell them, in case if you would feel interested to buy them. Speaking of it, the furniture includes a few chairs, made of oak wood, a large dining table, made of mahogany tree, and a couple of sofa chairs. I think that you would like the furniture since they seem to be in good shape and condition. Besides, the prices are also reasonable. So, please feel free drop by my place, preferably sometime in the next weekend, so that you can have a look at my furniture and decide whether to purchase them or not. Yours sincerely, Davis Woods
Dear Johnson,

Hope all is well at your
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end
. I am writing this letter to you
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because
I have
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some
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furniture
to sell, and I would
rather
have you
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buy
them
instead
of
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some
complete strangers.

I am trying to sell
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some
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furniture
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because
I am planning to
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move
to another city for professional reason.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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just
don’t want to carry them all the way to that city
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because
carrying them that far would most
probably
damage them.
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So
, I
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thought
that it would be a
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good
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idea
to
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let
you know about the
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furniture
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before
I sell them, in case if you would feel interested to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them.

Speaking of it, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
includes a few chairs, made of oak wood, a large dining table, made of mahogany tree, and a couple of sofa chairs. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that you would like the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
since they seem to be in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
shape and condition.
Besides
, the prices are
also
reasonable.

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So
,
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please
feel free drop by my place,
preferably
sometime in the
next
weekend,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you can have a look at my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
and decide whether to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
them or not.

Yours
sincerely
,

Davis Woods
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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