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Your neighbour keeps an animal in his / her garden and that is causing problem for you

Your neighbour keeps an animal in his / her garden and that is causing problem for you PRard

Mr Johan, I am writing this letter to complain about the dog that you leave open in the garden all time. I am disappointed with that as my child threat by a German puppy. First of all, I would like to say about that what our problem is? My kids are just turned 5 last week and, usually they hang out in the garden which actually beside you. However, I noticed that you keep your pet always in the park when the children are excited to play in the play area. Literally, they are scared of the pet animals especially a gigantic pup because it barks loudly on them by showing teeth. Consequently, if you don’t have a solution then I would like to give you advice. Though, you can hang a German puppy with a special rope while the children play nicely. Moreover, we can split our schedule for the safety purpose of my child. When you are not comfortable with this then I will take disciplinary action against you. I hope that you will reply in a positive way. Yours sincerely, Hardik Patel

Mr Johan,

I am writing this letter to complain about the dog that you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 open in the garden all time. I am disappointed
 with that as my child threat by a German puppy.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, I would like to say about that what our problem is? My kids are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 turned 5 last week and, usually
 they hang out in the garden which actually beside you. However
, I noticed that you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 your pet always in the park when the children are excited
 to play in the play area. Literally
, they are scared
 of the pet animals especially
 a gigantic pup This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it barks loudly
 on them by showing teeth.

Consequently
, if you don’t have a solution then I would like to give you advice. Though, you can hang a German puppy with a special rope while the children play nicely
. Moreover
, we can split our schedule for the safety purpose of my child. “When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
 you are not comfortable with this then I will take disciplinary action against you.

I hope that you will reply in a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 way.

Yours sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.Hardin
Hardik
 Patel