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Dear Sir, I am writing in regards with the preparation of presentation for the Embryology training workshop that is going to take place on 27th December, 2020. As per our discussion, I am going to prepare a power point presentation on Cryo-preservation Techniques. So, here I will be focusing on the important aspects of Embryo as well as Oocyte freezing. I am going to divide the procedure according to the quality of Embryos and Oocytes. In the end I will mention few research papers supporting out technique and end the discussion. I believe, this topic is going to interest many embryologist, as the technique performed by most of the IVF center's are traditional ones. This new technique had recently been introduced after a lot of research. So this topic will be of great help to others, as it possess better results with with simple procedure. So, in order to show them the entire procedure, apart from the laptop and good connectivity, I would also like to show them the kit required to perform this technique. So I will require a Cryo Top kit with all its media details. I hope you like the idea for conducting a presentation on this topic. Hope to see your response soon. Yours Faithfully, Kayra Datta.

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