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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money. v.5

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money. v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of the Alperton, London area, writing to request you to reconsider your decision to close the sport and leisure centre we have in our community. I am hoping that you would weigh the utility of this centre before shutting it down. As you know, we have more than 8 thousand members in our community and only two such leisure and sporting centres. When we are expecting another recreational centre for the benefits of the community members, the decision to shut down the 'Innercircle Sports & Leisure Centre' was some shocking news for us. I and my father go to this place to do our daily exercise. Besides, I have noticed many children play there in the evening and local people spend a significant amount of time there. Many teenagers have chosen this place to play some indoor games and spend quality times. If this place is closed, people would feel dejected and I personally worry that the teenagers who use this centre would get involved in subversive activities. This is not at all accepted. If cutting the cost is the only reason to close this centre, I am sure there are alternatives. I have talked to several other members and all of them are against closing this place. Please do reconsider your decision for the betterment of our community. Yours faithfully, Patrick Stuart
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a resident of the
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Alperton
, London area, writing to request you to reconsider your decision to close the sport and leisure
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centre
we have in our community. I am hoping that you would weigh the utility of this
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centre
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before
shutting it down.

As you know, we have more than 8 thousand members in our community and
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only
two such leisure and sporting
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centres
. When we are expecting another recreational
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centre
for the benefits of the community members, the decision to shut down the '
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Innercircle
Sports & Leisure
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Centre
' was
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some
shocking news for us. I and my father go to this place to do our daily exercise.
Besides
, I have noticed
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many
children play there in the evening and local
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people
spend a significant amount of time there.
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Many
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teenagers
have chosen this place to play
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some
indoor games and spend quality times.

If this place
is closed
,
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people
would feel dejected and I
personally
worry that the
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teenagers
who
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use
this
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centre
would
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get
involved in subversive activities. This is not at all
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accepted
. If cutting the cost is the
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only
reason to close this
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centre
, I am sure there are alternatives. I have talked to several other members and all of them are against closing this place.

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Please
do reconsider your decision for the betterment of our community.

Yours
faithfully
,

Patrick Stuart
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money. v. 5

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
230 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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