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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money. v.4

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my serious concerns about the recent decision by the local council to close ‘Grapevine Sports and Leisure Centre’ for the lack of funds. Well, while I understand that the decision has been taken in the greater interest of the citizen of Grapevine, I don’t think they fully endorse the idea because closing the sports and leisurely centre would deeply affect the physical and mental well-being of our neighbourhood in the long run. My family, friends and relatives come to this sports centre almost on a regular basis for various physical and social activities. We play badminton, we swim there, and we also use this facility to share our thoughts and opinions with other members of the community. Besides, this facility is also used by our children as their playground during the evening after their school hours. And, ultimately, because of this close bond among the members of our community, our neighbourhood can consider itself as a safe neighbourhood. So, based on these benefits of this sports and leisurely centre, I request you to keep this centre open until, at least, some alternatives are found. Yours faithfully, Lara Cunningham
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my serious concerns about the recent decision by the local council to close ‘Grapevine
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Sports
and Leisure
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Centre
’ for the lack of funds. Well, while I understand that the decision has
been taken
in the greater interest of the citizen of Grapevine, I don’t
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think
they
fully
endorse the
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idea
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because
closing the
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sports
and
leisurely
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centre
would
deeply
affect the physical and mental well-being of our
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neighbourhood
in the long run.

My family, friends and relatives
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come
to this
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sports
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centre
almost on a regular basis for various physical and social activities. We play badminton, we swim there, and we
also
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use
this facility to share our thoughts and opinions with other members of the community.
Besides
, this facility is
also
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used
by our children as their playground during the evening after their school hours. And,
ultimately
,
because of this
close bond among the members of our community, our
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neighbourhood
can consider itself as a safe
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neighbourhood
.

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So
, based on these benefits of
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this
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sports
and
leisurely
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centre
, I request you to
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keep
this
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centre
open until, at least,
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some
alternatives
are found
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Lara Cunningham
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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