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Your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money, in order to save money. Write a letter to the council. In your letter -give details of how you and your friend or family use the center -explain why the center is important for the local community -describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes

Your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money, in order to save money. Write a letter to the council. In your letter -give details of how you and your friend or family use the center -explain why the center is important for the local community -describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes VWyK
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the closure of recreational facility on the Persia street. My family and I have been using this sport complex since 1995. to be precise, I spent whole my childhood there and it created a number of memories for us. we used to play football game on Saturdays. Actually this is a special place for us in order to hang out and have a picnic on weekends. Jonathan Sport complex has been one of the crucial area of our neighborhood. all the children and families use at least one of the sport pitch every weekend. Furthermore, this complex is not important just for sports activities, the traditional music festival has been held once a year there. I think if you decide to close this center without any consideration, It might have a devastating effect on our community. people would not commute long distance to the another center and children should spend their spare time on street and it could be dangereous for them. I hope you can revise your decision at your earliest convenienve. Yours faithfully Alireza dadashpour
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the closure of recreational facility on the Persia street. My family and I have been using this
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to play football game on Saturdays. Actually this is a special place for us in order to hang out and have a picnic on weekends. Jonathan
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complex has been one of the crucial area of our neighborhood.
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the children and families
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at least one of the
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pitch every weekend.
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, this complex is not
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activities, the traditional music festival has
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once a year there. I
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if you decide to close this center without any consideration, It might have a devastating effect on our community.
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people
would not commute long distance to the another center and children should spend their spare time on street and it could be
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dangereous
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IELTS letter Your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money, in order to save money. Write a letter to the council. In your letter -give details of how you and your friend or family use the center -explain why the center is important for the local community -describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes

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