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Your high school environmental club would like to start a new clean-up campaign in your area. They would like to hear students’ suggestions on what would be the best clean-up activity to organize. Write an email to the teacher in charge of the club to suggest what clean-up activity the school could do and how it would help the environment. Give reasons to support your ideas

Your high school environmental club would like to start a new clean-up campaign in your area. They would like to hear students’ suggestions on what would be the best clean-up activity to organize. Write an email to the teacher in charge of the club to suggest what clean-up activity the school could do and how it would help the environment. Give reasons to support your ideas YB3ed
I am a high school student of Doukas school and I am writing because I want to suggest the best clean-up activities that the clean-up club can organize. The clean-up club is going to help the environment a lot and it will raise awareness to the community. First, I think that they should contact the principal of are school and decide one day that all students during break can pick up rubbish. That will help the school environment. Furthermore, we can raise some money and give it to the members of the area and they can provide to the community more recycling bins. For example, every student of our school that wants to help can give us some money. That will help significantly because we don’t have sufficient rubbish bins in the area. In addition, they can make a school project that will inform us about the easy things that we can apply on our daily basis and will help reduce the pollution. For instance, they can suggest recycling, not wasting water and turning the lights off when it is not necessary. In conclusion, I hope that my suggestions will be helpful and my ideas will be taken into consideration. Your Sincerely
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the environment a lot and it will raise awareness to the community.
First
, I
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think
that they should contact the principal of are
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school
and decide one day that all students during break can pick up rubbish. That will
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help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
environment.
Furthermore
, we can raise
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some
money and give it to the members of the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
area and
they can provide to the community more recycling bins.
For example
, every student of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
that wants to
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help
can give us
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some
money. That will
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help
significantly
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because
we don’t have sufficient rubbish bins in the area.
In addition
, they can
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make
a
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school
project that will inform us about the easy things that we can apply on our daily basis and will
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help
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reduce
the pollution.
For instance
, they can suggest recycling, not wasting water and turning the lights off when it is not necessary.

In conclusion
, I hope that my suggestions will be helpful and my
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ideas
will
be taken
into consideration.

Your
Sincerely

IELTS letter Your high school environmental club would like to start a new clean-up campaign in your area. They would like to hear students’ suggestions on what would be the best clean-up activity to organize. Write an email to the teacher in charge of the club to suggest what clean-up activity the school could do and how it would help the environment. Give reasons to support your ideas

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