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Your friend who is going to further her study abroad is hesitant to choose the major between business management and music. Write a letter to offer some suggestions. In your letter, you should. 1. Explain how you feel when you receive her letter. 2. Explain the benefits of both subjects 3. Give your suggestion

Your friend who is going to further her study abroad is hesitant to choose the major between business management and music. Write a letter to offer some suggestions. In your letter, you should. 1. Explain how you feel when you receive her letter. 2. Explain the benefits of both subjects 3. Give your suggestion XG6Nr
Dear Anu, I have received your letter and glad that you all are doing good. Also, I am happy to hear that you secure your admission in Canada University for your further study. but in your letter mentioned that you are in dilemma to choose the major subject between business management or music for Master degree. Here, I am providing some benefits of each era of the speciality which can help you to elect the major subject for higher education. Each subject has individual profits in the future. If you take business management as a Main subject, will get better job in the future. In addition, you have completed your bachelor in Management with great academic record so it is related to your field. Moreover, the service sector is increasing globally and the person with management certificate will be in demand. Either you select music as a primary it will help you to build up career in the entertained sector. I know your childhood dream always want to make profession in it. Instrumental sounds will make you stress-free. In fact, Upcoming market scenario will be demanding more skill management people. So according to my opine, you should elect business management as a primary subject rather than music. Hope this suggestion will provide you better aspect for choosing subject. Please let me know if you need any help without any hesitation. Yours faithfully, Aarti.
Dear
Anu
,

I have received your letter and glad that you all are doing
good
.
Also
, I am happy to hear that you secure your admission in Canada University for your
further
study.
but
in your letter mentioned that you are in dilemma to choose the major
subject
between business
management
or music for Master degree.

Here, I am providing
some
benefits of each era of the
speciality
which can
help
you to elect the major
subject
for higher education. Each
subject
has individual profits in the future. If you take business
management
as a Main
subject
, will
get
better job in the future.
In addition
, you have completed your bachelor in
Management
with great academic record
so
it
is related
to your field.
Moreover
, the service sector is increasing globally and the person with
management
certificate will be in demand. Either you select music as a primary it will
help
you to build up career in the entertained sector. I know your childhood dream always want to
make
profession in it. Instrumental sounds will
make
you
stress
-free. In fact, Upcoming market scenario will be demanding more
skill
management
people
.
So
according to my opine, you should elect business
management
as a primary
subject
rather
than music.

Hope this suggestion will provide you better aspect for choosing
subject
.
Please
let
me know if you need any
help
without any hesitation.

Yours
faithfully
,

Aarti
.
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IELTS letter Your friend who is going to further her study abroad is hesitant to choose the major between business management and music. Write a letter to offer some suggestions. In your letter, you should. 1. Explain how you feel when you receive her letter. 2. Explain the benefits of both subjects 3. Give your suggestion

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  American English
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6.0
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