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Your friend is in another country. Write a letter to your friend asking for advice about employment opportunities in his country. In your letter, you should tell: – Why you want to work there – What skills and work experience you have – Inquire about the benefits (salary and hours).

Your friend is in another country. Write a letter to your friend asking for advice about employment opportunities in his country. In your letter, you should tell: – Why you want to work there – What skills and work experience you have – Inquire about the benefits (salary and hours). 0lgjB
Dear Nga, Long time no see. Hopefully, everything has been fine. Today, I am writing this email to ask you about employment opportunities in your country. Actually, only a few months, I going to graduate university in Viet Nam. I feel my major has little chance to grow jobs in Vietnam. Moreover, I like life in America and the main reason is I want to come to America to live with my family. It can be seen that My major is hotel manager. In the learning process in VietNam, I also learned quite many skills such as: tour guide, leadership, teamwork, . . and I have work experience in fields such as: marketing, sale, . . when I was a student. I have worked part time at Melia HN. By the way, I want to ask you about benefits including hours of work. What is the working day like in America? How is life in America I look forward to your response! Hopefully, we can meet in America soon! Best wishes,
Dear
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Nam. I feel my major has
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chance to grow jobs in Vietnam.
Moreover
, I like life in America and the main reason is I want to
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come
to America to
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live
with my family.

It can be
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that My major is hotel manager. In the learning process in
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VietNam
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also
learned quite
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skills
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and
I have work experience in fields such as: marketing, sale
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part time
at
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Melia
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HN
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By the way, I want to ask you about benefits including hours of work. What is the working day like in America? How is life in America

I look forward to your response!
Hopefully
, we can
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in America
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Best wishes,
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IELTS letter Your friend is in another country. Write a letter to your friend asking for advice about employment opportunities in his country. In your letter, you should tell: – Why you want to work there – What skills and work experience you have – Inquire about the benefits (salary and hours).

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  American English
6 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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