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I am writing to give you updates about my internship in which I have been enrolled for three weeks now in an international company called "Building For The Future".

I am writing to give you updates about my internship in which I have been enrolled for three weeks now in an international company called "Building For The Future". kgqB2
Dear Mr Paul, I am writing to give you updates about my internship in which I have been enrolled for three weeks now in an international company called "Building For The Future". First of all, I would like to appreciate you for the help and the support you have given us throughout the course. Also I would like to thank you for suggesting me to take part of such an amazing team with whom I feel at ease. Without your intervention, I probably wouldn't be able to find a place to do my training. Since I have been here, I have acquired a valuable experience which will definitely help me to find a job. In fact, we are currently working on the construction of a multi-storey building nearby the city council and I am in charge of the supervision of the construction staff and the advancement of the project. Indeed, I have to deliver a weekly overview to the manager about the difficulty encountered on the site anf what what should be done to improve the safty there. Due to my perseverance and my motivation, the company manager promised to offer me a job after graduation. So, if everything go as expected and successfully passed the exams, I may accept his offer and work here. Thank you again for you support. Yours sincerely,
Dear Mr Paul,

I am writing to give you updates about my internship in which I have
been enrolled
for three weeks
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now
in an international
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company
called
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"
Building For The Future
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"
.

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First of all
, I would like to appreciate you for the
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help
and the support you have
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given
us throughout the course.
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Also
I would like to thank you for suggesting me to
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take part
of such an amazing team with whom I feel at
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ease
. Without your intervention, I
probably
wouldn't be able to find a place to do my training.

Since I have been here, I have acquired a valuable experience which will definitely
In informal texts, 'to' is not necessary. Do you mean "help me find"?
help me to find
a job. In fact, we are
currently
working on the construction of a
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multi-storey
building nearby the city
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council and
I am in charge of the supervision of the construction staff and the advancement of the project.
Indeed
, I
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have to
deliver a weekly overview to the manager about the difficulty encountered on the site
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anf
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what what
should
be done
to
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improve
the
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safty
there.

Due to my perseverance and my motivation, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
manager promised to offer me a job after graduation.
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So
, if everything go as
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expected
and
successfully
passed the exams, I may accept his offer and work here.

Thank you again for you support.

Yours
sincerely
,
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IELTS letter I am writing to give you updates about my internship in which I have been enrolled for three weeks now in an international company called "Building For The Future".

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  American English
7 paragraphs
223 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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