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Your friend is crazy about shopping. But his\her parents don’t like it. They often have a conflict about it.

Your friend is crazy about shopping. But his\her parents don’t like it. They often have a conflict about it. 3gYMw
Dear Sabina, How is it going? I hope this letter will find you in good health and high spirits. I’ve just received your letter, and I’m sorry to hear about squabbling with your parents. Unfortunately, I often quarrel with my parents too. Mainly we fight about them telling me what to do. They treat me like a child and do not listen to my opinion. I am treated like a child, so I tend to behave like a child. Despite of that, I do and will always love my parents unconditionally. That's why I try to restrain myself and avoid saying bad things. Frankly speaking, I don't understand your parents. As far as I know, shopping is an activity most people enjoy. I'm extremely fond of buying something too. I go shopping every week. Sometimes I prefer to shop on the Internet. Finaly, I'd like to say that you might not agree with many of your parents' opinions, and you might be right. However, you don't have to make a point by loudly disagreeing with them. The best advice I can give you is try reaching a compromise that make everyone happy. For example, if you are willing to tidy up the house in order to purchase something new, both you and your parents walk away with a good deal. So, don’t worry! There should always be a way out! I hope this advice will be useful. Please write to me again to tell how things are going on or if you need any more help. By the way, would you like to go shopping together next week? Lots of love, Tori
Dear Sabina,

How is it going? I hope this letter will find you in
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good
health and high spirits. I’ve
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just
received your letter, and I’m sorry to hear about squabbling with your parents.

Unfortunately, I
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often
quarrel with my
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parents
too.
Mainly
we fight about them telling me what to do. They treat me like a child and do not listen to my opinion. I
am treated
like a child,
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so
I tend to behave like a child.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
that, I do and will always
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love
my
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parents
unconditionally
. That's why I try to restrain myself and avoid saying
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bad
things.

Frankly
speaking, I don't understand your
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parents
. As far as I know, shopping is an activity most
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people
enjoy. I'm
extremely
fond of buying something too. I go shopping every week.
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Sometimes
I prefer to shop on the Internet.

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Finaly
, I'd like to say that you might not
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agree
with
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many
of your parents' opinions, and you might be right.
However
, you don't
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have to
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make
a point by
loudly
disagreeing with them. The best advice I can give you is try reaching a compromise that
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make
everyone happy.
For example
, if you are willing to tidy up the
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house
in order to
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purchase
something new, both you and your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
walk away with a
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good
deal.

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So
, don’t worry! There should always be a way out!

I hope this advice will be useful.
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Please
write to me again to
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tell
how things are going on or if you need any more
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help
. By the way, would you like to go shopping together
next
week?

Lots of
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love
,

Tori
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IELTS letter Your friend is crazy about shopping. But his\her parents don’t like it. They often have a conflict about it.

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271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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