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WRITE A LETTER TO YOUR MANAGER TO ASK FOR ADDING DUTY HOURS TO YOUR ROUTINE WHICH WILL EFFECT YOUR SALARY. pROVIDE A REASON AND EXPLAIN WHERE POSSIBLE.

WRITE A LETTER TO YOUR MANAGER TO ASK FOR ADDING DUTY HOURS TO YOUR ROUTINE WHICH WILL EFFECT YOUR SALARY. pROVIDE A REASON AND EXPLAIN WHERE POSSIBLE. jQ5xM
I have been working as Medical Imaging Technologist in Islamabad Diagnostic centre Evercare Hospital Lahore since 19th May 2021. I have worked my best and tried to prove my competence. I am writing this to ask you for favor and inform you about my current financial condition. It had been hard since my father had heart attack in April this year. As elder brother of four I have to shoulder responsibilities of my dependents. To cope up with their expenses, I need to do extra work and I am keen to do that. My duty hours since my appointment are 8 hours a day. I have few options other than my current job. Which I can do after working hours but I am eager to work in my field. I am humbly coliciting you to allow me to work for up to 12 hours, In context If I am fulfilling IDC norms. I will be thankful to you. I hope to hearing from you soon.
I have been working as Medical Imaging Technologist in Islamabad Diagnostic
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centre
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Evercare
Hospital Lahore since 19th May 2021. I have worked my best and tried to prove my competence.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am writing this to ask you for favor and inform you about my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
financial condition. It had been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
since my father had heart attack in April this year.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
elder brother of four I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
shoulder responsibilities of my dependents. To cope up with their expenses, I need to do extra
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
work and
I am keen to do that. My duty
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
since my appointment are 8
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hours
a day. I have few options other than my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
job. Which I can do after working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
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but
I am eager to work in my field. I am
humbly
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coliciting
you to
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allow
me to work for up to 12
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
, In context If I am fulfilling IDC norms.

I will be thankful to you.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.
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IELTS letter WRITE A LETTER TO YOUR MANAGER TO ASK FOR ADDING DUTY HOURS TO YOUR ROUTINE WHICH WILL EFFECT YOUR SALARY. pROVIDE A REASON AND EXPLAIN WHERE POSSIBLE.

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165 words
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