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Your friend is about to move into a new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to help him/her to move explain how exactly you can help ask him/her some questions about the new house

Dear John, How are you? I would to thank you that you attended Elsa wedding on my behalf. I was stuck in a meeting that is why I was unable to be the part of her big day. Mom told me that you and your family are shifting from club Street to hidden Park avenue. I am jubilant because my building is just a kilometre away from your apartment. We are childhood friends and you know formalities does not exist between us but, if you need any kind of help in moving your house you can call me at any time of the day. I will be glad to help you in any kind of work or problem. As you know, my I spend my teenages in that location where you rent a house. I am well aware of all the technical people like plumber, electrician, painter, mechanic and so on. It is more satisfactory if you know these labour very well. Andy your sister is a fitness freak I know the best gym nearby your area. If you require any kind of information regarding the area, people shops, restaurants etc you just ring me. Few things I want to ask about your house is that do you cross check the availability of electricity and water in your house? Depending on the words of the owner of the house sometimes create problems. Secondly, I am not sure on which floor of the building you rent a house is at 6th floor or 5th floor? Lastly, the owner give you permission to renovate your house according to your taste. I wish everything goes smoothly, I will be waiting for your reply and feel free to ask for help. Best regards, Ramsha.
Dear John, How are you? I would to thank you that you attended Elsa wedding on my behalf. I
was stuck
in a meeting
that is
why I was unable to be the part of her
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big
day. Mom
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told
me that you and your family are shifting from club Street to hidden Park avenue. I am jubilant
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because
my building is
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just
a
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kilometre
away from your apartment. We are childhood
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
friends and
you
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know
formalities does not exist between us
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but
, if you need any kind of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in moving your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
you can call me at any time of the day. I will be glad to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you in any kind of work or problem. As you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
, my I spend my
Possible spelling mistake found.
teenages
in that location where you rent a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
. I am well aware of all the technical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
like plumber, electrician, painter, mechanic and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on. It is more satisfactory if you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
these
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labour
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very
well. Andy your sister is a fitness freak I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
the best gym nearby your area. If you require any kind of information regarding the area,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
If ‘people’ is plural here, don’t use the third-person singular verb.
shops
, restaurants etc you
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just
ring me. Few things I want to ask about your
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house
is that do
Did you mean “your”?
you
cross
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check
the availability of electricity and water in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
? Depending on the words of the owner of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
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sometimes
create problems.
Secondly
, I am not sure on which floor of the building you rent a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
is at 6th floor or 5th floor?
Lastly
, the owner give you permission to renovate your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
according to your taste. I wish everything goes
smoothly
, I will be waiting for your reply and feel free to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. Best regards,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ramsha
.

IELTS letter Your friend is about to move into a new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to help him/her to move explain how exactly you can help ask him/her some questions about the new house

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
290 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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