Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Your company is going to organise a training in a local conference centre . Your manager has asked you to find a centre . Write a letter to the manager to tell him about the event , share equipment details what you want And ask some questions about the facilities .

Your company is going to organise a training in a local conference centre. Your manager has asked you to find a centre. Write a letter to the manager to tell him about the event, share equipment details what you want And ask some questions about the facilities. 0AOMl
Dear Mr Shah, I am writing this letter to enquire about the facilities of your conference center for our upcoming training course dated 30th May. It is a two days induction programme for our new trainees, starting from 1st May. Timings of training will be from 9 am to 5 pm. Purpose of this training is to share details about the company’s policies and procedures. Key responsibilities and details about the function of the company's in-house software will also be provided to the trainees. In order to complete the training, we require some appliances such as one table, two mikes, fifty chairs along with a projector. We also need a desk for the registration part and some posters to redirect trainees directly to the conference hall. I wonder if you could help me for lunch and refreshments? Do you provide a generator as well for the uninterrupted power supply throughout the training? Please share the particulars of parking as well if it is available? I would really appreciate it if you could reply at your earliest convenience. Yours Sincerely, Pinky Seth
Dear Mr Shah,

I am writing this letter to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
about the facilities of your conference center for our upcoming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
course dated 30th May.

It is a two days induction
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
for our new trainees, starting from 1st May. Timings of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
will be from 9 am to 5 pm. Purpose of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
is to share
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
’s policies and procedures. Key responsibilities and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about the function of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
's in-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
software will
also
be provided
to the trainees.

In order to complete the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
, we require
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
appliances such as one table, two mikes, fifty chairs along with a projector. We
also
need a desk for the registration part and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
posters to redirect trainees
directly
to the conference hall.

I wonder if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me for lunch and refreshments? Do you provide a generator
as well
for the uninterrupted power supply throughout the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
?
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
share the particulars of parking
as well
if it is available?

I would
really
appreciate it if you could reply at your earliest convenience.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Pinky Seth
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS letter Your company is going to organise a training in a local conference centre. Your manager has asked you to find a centre. Write a letter to the manager to tell him about the event, share equipment details what you want And ask some questions about the facilities.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Your company is going to organise a training in a local conference centre . Your manager has asked you to find a centre . Write a letter to the manager to tell him about the event , share equipment details what you want And ask some questions about the facilities .