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Your company holds a staff party every every in the same hotel. This time you are tasked to organize the party and you have to write a letter to the hotel's manager. Include the following in your letter. - write about your past experience with the hotel - what are your impressions with the hotel's service - what you want to ask the manager

Your company holds a staff party every every in the same hotel. This time you are tasked to organize the party and you have to write a letter to the hotel's manager. Include the following in your letter. - write about your past experience with the hotel - what are your impressions with the hotel's service - what you want to ask the manager 15b0L
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to inform you that once again my company is planning to organise party in your hotel. Every year we celebrate company's staff party at your place and we all are happy with our past experience. Because your hotel is full with the all modern aminities and party room is very huge and attractive. As a result of this, I decided to celebrate function once again in a same place. Hotel's service is excellent and all staff members are very helpful. They are doing their best in a positive way, so people can enjoy properly and it makes your place unique. It would be really appreciated if you manage time for the meeting, so we can meet and finalize the price, date and manu for party. My number is 9059009876. If you want to contact me directly. Hoping to hear from you soon! Yours faithfully, RUSHI.
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you that once again my
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company
is planning to
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organise
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party
in your hotel.

Every year we celebrate
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company
's staff
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party
at your
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place and
we all are happy with our
Consider using "experience".
past experience
.
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Because
your hotel is
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full with
the all modern
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aminities
and
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party
room is
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very
huge and attractive.
As a result
of this, I decided to celebrate function once again in a same place.

Hotel's service is excellent and all staff members are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
helpful. They are doing their best in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way,
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so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can enjoy
properly
and it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
your place unique.

It would be
really
appreciated if you manage time for the meeting,
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so
we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
and finalize the price, date and
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manu
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
. My number is 9059009876. If you want to contact me
directly
.

Hoping to hear from you
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soon
!

Yours
faithfully
,

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RUSHI
.

IELTS letter Your company holds a staff party every every in the same hotel. This time you are tasked to organize the party and you have to write a letter to the hotel's manager. Include the following in your letter. - write about your past experience with the hotel - what are your impressions with the hotel's service - what you want to ask the manager

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  American English
8 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
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