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Your are invented to the monthly study in Samakand. Ask the manager of the hotel where you will stay to give you an appointment with some conviniences. You should write in your letter: Size and location of your appartment. View from the window. Furniture and equipment of the room.

Your are invented to the monthly study in Samakand. Ask the manager of the hotel where you will stay to give you an appointment with some conviniences. You should write in your letter: Size and location of your appartment. View from the window. Furniture and equipment of the room. Ql0xX
Dear managerI am writing this letter to request about giving an apartment in your hotel for me. I am offered to Samarkand for the monthly study. I except to be in Samarkand during a month. I would like to arrange an apartment for my living there permanently. It should be big enough and well equipped with cozy furniture. I hope to locate in the high floor because the ground floor is always noisy. I want to watch picturesque sightseeing of the city through the window. I would be really grateful if my apartment is located towards the rising the sun. I need to bring a lot of clothes and some necessary things to live there. Hence the weather is getting cold day by day. It would be preferable to me if the room shelves are bigger. So that I am hoping to take equipment for other things, like books, shoes and laptop, if possible. Could you provide this, please? I am looking forward to receiving information about your hotel equipments and other facilities. Your faithfully. Fotima Ravshanova
Dear
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managerI
Did you mean "am I"?
am
writing this letter to request about giving an apartment in your hotel for me. I
am offered
to Samarkand for the monthly study. I except to be in Samarkand during a month.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to arrange an apartment for my living there
permanently
. It should be
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big
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enough
and
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well equipped
with cozy furniture. I hope to locate in the high floor
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because
the
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ground floor
is always noisy. I want to
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watch
picturesque sightseeing of the city through the window.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would be
really
grateful if my apartment
is located
towards the rising the sun.
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I
need to bring
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a lot of
clothes and
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some
necessary things to
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live
there.
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Hence
the weather is getting
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cold
day by day. It would be preferable to me if the room shelves are bigger.
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So
that I am hoping to take equipment for other things, like books, shoes and laptop, if possible. Could you provide this,
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please
? I am looking forward to receiving information about your hotel equipments and other facilities. Your
faithfully
.
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Fotima
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Ravshanova
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IELTS letter Your are invented to the monthly study in Samakand. Ask the manager of the hotel where you will stay to give you an appointment with some conviniences. You should write in your letter: Size and location of your appartment. View from the window. Furniture and equipment of the room.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
176 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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