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Your are going where your friend live and ask about evening entertainment

Your are going where your friend live and ask about evening entertainment oRJ5b
Dear SusanI am writing to enquire about taking extra lessons at your university library which is organised by the principle of the university. I have heard about it from the advertisement that was given on a local radio channel. As you know, I am interested in detective stories and also looking for and finding hidden things. When I had heard about that I understood that this course is for me which is held discussions on theme criminals and robbery among young generation. I have talked to organizators of the course and I will get here next Monday and if you do not mind, we will book a room from the nearest hotel for three or four days and we can spend time together. I think we will have a great time, especially in the evenings. What evening entertainments do you offer and which one is your favourite? I will try not to bother you during your lessons. If you like my plan please let me know. I look forward to recieving your reply. Kind regards Lucy
Dear
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SusanI
Did you mean "am I"?
am
writing to
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enquire
about taking extra lessons at your university library which is
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organised
by the principle of the university. I have heard about it from the advertisement that was
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given
on a local radio channel. As you know, I
am interested
in detective stories and
also
looking for and finding hidden things. When I had heard about that I understood that this course is for me which
is held
discussions on theme criminals and robbery among young generation. I have talked to
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organizators
of the course and I will
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get
here
next
Monday and if you do not mind, we will book a room from the nearest hotel for three or four
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days and
we can spend time together. I
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think
we will have a great time,
especially
in the evenings. What evening entertainments do you offer and which one is your
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favourite
? I will try not to bother you during your lessons.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you like my plan
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please
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let
me know. I look forward to
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recieving
your reply. Kind regards
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Lucy
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IELTS letter Your are going where your friend live and ask about evening entertainment

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
175 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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