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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Sir/Madam I hope this letter finds you well, I'm writting this letter regards to IT Speacialist seminar that will be held in Melbourne. I heard it from my collegue that you will having a seminar to a field that i belong too. I'm very interested to participate can i request a few details about the dates and time, program content and also the accommodation cost. I'm Cherry Mercado from the Philippines, I'm working in this field for almost 2 years and i think participating in this kind of seminar will help me to gain more knowledge and learning. But i have narrow details about this gathering. Therefore, i request a few details. Such as, when will be the exact date for the seminar and what topics i'm going to expect? and also will be the company arrange the accommodation or the participants will do? and also i'm eager to know what will be all in all cost to the seminar. I'm look forward for your immediate respond. Thanks for understanding. Yours sincerely. Cherry Mercado
Dear Sir/Madam

I hope this letter finds you well, I'm
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writting
this letter regards to IT
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Speacialist
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seminar
that will
be held
in Melbourne. I heard it from my
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collegue
that you will
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having
a
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seminar
to a field that
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i
belong too.
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I
'm
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very
interested to participate can
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i
request a few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about the dates and time, program content and
also
the accommodation cost.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
'm Cherry Mercado from the Philippines, I'm working in this field for almost 2 years and
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i
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think
participating in this kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to gain more knowledge and learning.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have narrow
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about this gathering.
Therefore
,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
request a few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
. Such as, when will be the exact date for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
and what topics
Did you mean "I'm"?
i'm
going to
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expect
?
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and
also
will be the
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company
arrange the accommodation or the participants will do?
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
and
also
Did you mean "I'm"?
i'm
eager to know what will be all in all cost to the seminar.

I'm look forward for your immediate
Did you mean "response"?
respond
. Thanks for understanding.

Yours
sincerely
.

Cherry Mercado
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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