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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address. D08o
I am writing to let you know that I would like to participate in your Marketing Management seminar which is held in Sydney. My name is James Potter. I am currently working is ABC company as a marketing advisor. I saw one of your flyers yesterday on my company advertising board. I was wondering if there are any vacant slots so that I can fill in. I have heard a few of your presentations on television before and found them quite mesmerizing, helpful. I am also a great admirer of your work. It was given in the brochure that the meeting will take place for 4 days, but the exact date, time, venue were not mentioned. In addition, there was no detail about the accommodation type, program feature, the schedule of events. I would like to request you to send a flyer or brochure along with the letter regarding the details. Looking forward to hearing back from you. Thanks a lot for your considerations. yours sincerely, James Potter.
I am writing to
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let
you know that I would like to participate in your Marketing Management seminar which
is held
in Sydney. My name is James Potter. I am
currently
working is ABC
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company
as a marketing advisor.

I
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saw
one of your flyers yesterday on my
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company
advertising board.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was wondering if there are any vacant slots
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so
that I can fill in.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have heard a few of your presentations on television
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before
and found them quite mesmerizing, helpful.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
also
a great admirer of your work.

It was
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given
in the brochure that the meeting will take place for 4 days,
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but
the exact date, time, venue were not mentioned.
In addition
, there was no detail about the accommodation type, program feature, the schedule of
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events
.

I would like to request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a flyer or brochure along with the letter regarding the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
. Looking forward to hearing back from you.

Thanks a lot for your considerations.

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yours
sincerely
,

James Potter.
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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