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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address AjLyL
Dear Sir or Madam, I, Mustafa Ahmed, working as a Manager Internal Audit at National Clearing Company of Pakistan Limited, Pakistan's central gravity for Capital Markets and one-off solution to market participants for settlement and clearing. I have heard from the Institute of Internal Auditors (IIA) Pakistan Chapter that there will be a conference going to happen this summer of Digital Transformation for Internal Auditors in this Digital Age at IIA Headquarters, New York, USA. I would like to inquire about the conference, what dates it will be held, how much we to pay for it, when it is scheduled or how many events are planned, which topics or areas will be covered in the seminar, and detail regarding the speakers, moderators. Further, I would like to have information regarding the accommodation and costs associated with it. Whether it will be provided to us or we have to plan and book it in advance. I am very much interested in attending the seminar and your reply would help me plan for it in advance. So, I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding my concerns. Yours faithfully, Mustafa Ahmed
Dear Sir or Madam,

I, Mustafa Ahmed, working as a Manager Internal Audit at National Clearing
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Company
of Pakistan Limited, Pakistan's central gravity for Capital Markets and one-off solution to market participants for settlement and clearing. I have heard from the Institute of Internal Auditors (IIA) Pakistan Chapter that there will be a conference going to happen this summer of Digital Transformation for Internal Auditors in this Digital Age at IIA Headquarters, New York, USA.

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I
would like to inquire about the conference, what dates it will
be held
, how much we to pay for it, when it
is scheduled
or how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
are planned
, which topics or areas will
be covered
in the seminar, and detail regarding the speakers, moderators.
Further
, I would like to have information regarding the accommodation and costs associated with it. Whether it will
be provided
to
Use a comma before 'or' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us or
we
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have to
plan and book it in advance.

I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much interested in attending the seminar and your reply would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me plan for it in advance.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
regarding my concerns.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mustafa Ahmed
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address

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6 paragraphs
190 words
6.5
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