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You would like to join the local orchestra. Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice – Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate – Express your enthusiasm for music

You would like to join the local orchestra. Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice – Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate – Express your enthusiasm for music m18ML
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in relation to the advertised position of chief conductor at the local orchestra in Sunday times. I have done MS Music from High school music. Apart from the music education degree, I also have a performance degree from Opera music and arts center. In addition, I have hands-on experience of guitar, as I was leading my school's opera. There my main responsibilities center around, to control the ensemble through visible gesture, setting the tempo, shaping the group interpretations and sound, selecting the music for performance. Furthermore, I love to spend my free time, by learning new notes, studying scores and listening to new music as I am very passionate about the music. I believe, my experience makes me a suitable candidate for this job. Please, find my CV attached for your perusal. If you have any further queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to discussing this opportunity further at interview. regards
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in relation to the advertised position of chief conductor at the local orchestra in Sunday times.

I have done MS
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from High school
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. Apart from the
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music
education degree, I
also
have a performance degree from Opera
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music
and arts center.
In addition
, I have hands-on experience of guitar, as I was leading my school's opera. There my main responsibilities center around, to control the ensemble through visible gesture, setting the tempo, shaping the group interpretations and sound, selecting the
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music
for performance.
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, I
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love
to spend my free time, by learning new notes, studying scores and listening to new
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music
as I am
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very
passionate about the music.

I believe, my experience
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makes
me a suitable candidate for this job.
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Please
, find my CV attached for your perusal. If you have any
further
queries,
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please
do not hesitate to contact me.

I look forward to discussing this opportunity
further
at interview.

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regards

IELTS letter You would like to join the local orchestra. Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice – Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate – Express your enthusiasm for music

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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