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you would like to invite a foreign friendon your birthday

you would like to invite a foreign friendon your birthday 269Qo
Dear Susan, Hope you are doing well and are in the best of spirits. It’s been long since we have had the time to catch up and reminisce about things. I am hoping to meet you soon. I am planning to organise my birthday party this year at my place. It’s coming in the weekend so it will be comfortable for all my close ones to attend. I have plethora of ideas for making this evening special. I am planning to arrange plenty of games which many of us enjoy and also arranging barbeque in my garden. Your presence will increase my happiness to new level. You can meet all our friends group and we can have fun altogether. You can stay at my place for the weekend and we can arrange party together and spend plenty of time together. My parents are also very much keen to meet you. My mom is preparing biryani especially for you. Please confirm if you are comfortable for coming on my birthday party and staying the weekend together. Let me know if you have any suggestions or ideas for the party. Looking forward to meet you soon. Yours Lovingly, Suraj
Dear Susan,

Hope you are doing well and are in the best of spirits. It’s been long since we have had the time to catch up and reminisce about things. I am hoping to
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meet
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I am planning to
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organise
my birthday
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party
this year at my place. It’s coming in the weekend
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so
it will be comfortable for all my close ones to attend. I have plethora of
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ideas
for making this evening special. I am planning to arrange
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plenty
of games which
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many
of us enjoy and
also
arranging
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barbeque
in my garden.

Your presence will increase my happiness to new level. You can
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meet
all our friends
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group and
we can have fun altogether. You can stay at my place for the
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weekend and
we can arrange
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party
together and spend
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plenty
of time together. My parents are
also
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very
much keen to
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meet
you. My mom is preparing biryani
especially
for you.

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Please
confirm if you are comfortable for coming on my birthday
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party
and staying the weekend together.
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Let
me know if you have any suggestions or
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ideas
for the
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party
. Looking forward to
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meet
you
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soon
.

Yours
Lovingly
,

Suraj
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IELTS letter you would like to invite a foreign friendon your birthday

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  American English
7 paragraphs
196 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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