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Suggest your friend whether she needs to go to college or try to get a job.

Suggest your friend whether she needs to go to college or try to get a job. 3M9YJ
Dear Salina, I received your letter today. I am delighted to hear that you finished your school properly and now looking for advice for your next step. In my opinion, you better search for a job rather than starting your college. Going to college will not be suitable for you as the syllabus there is very rigorous and you have to attend classes regularly to get full marks in your attendance portion. As you need to earn your own livelihood it would be really difficult for you to study and work at the same time and it’s a long way to go. However, if you work you will meet pupil of your different ages with diversified experiences and surely you will enjoy being with them. Besides, if you start working now, the experience you will gain will help you in your future career. As you enjoy meeting new people every day working as a shop attendant would suit you the most and there would be a chance to promote to the position of a store manager in near future. Hope the suggestion will help you to decide your future course of action and hope to meet you soon. Don’t forget to pay a visit to my home when you are in the city. Lots of love. Zanna
Dear Salina,

I received your letter
today
. I
am delighted
to hear that you finished your school
properly
and
now
looking for advice for your
next
step.

In my opinion, you better search for a job
rather
than starting your college. Going to college will not be suitable for you as the syllabus there is
very
rigorous and you
have to
attend classes
regularly
to
get
full marks in your attendance portion. As you need to earn your
own
livelihood it would be
really
difficult for you to study and work at the same time and it’s a long way to go.

However
, if you work you will
meet
pupil of your
different
ages with diversified experiences and
surely
you will enjoy being with them.
Besides
, if you
start
working
now
, the experience you will gain will
help
you in your future career. As you enjoy meeting new
people
every day working as a shop attendant would suit you the most and there would be a chance to promote to the position of a store manager in near future.

Hope the suggestion will
help
you to decide your future course of action and hope to
meet
you
soon
. Don’t forget to pay a visit to my home when you are in the city.

Lots of
love
.

Zanna
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IELTS letter Suggest your friend whether she needs to go to college or try to get a job.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
216 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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