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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Dear sir/madam, I am writing this letter to get some information regarding electronics goods I would like to buy from your shop. I live in the green city which is on the outskirts of your town. As I am looking forward to purchasing a laptop and a printer, I remembered the ad of your shop in the newspaper. I want to know whether you take orders in advance and if so how much time before I have to place an order. I would also like to know about the charges of the home delivery option if provided. Further, if you can provide me with some information about the brands of the products I can buy from you, would be very useful. Moreover, I need the prices of different laptops and printers you sell at your showroom. Lastly, it would be really kind of you to tell me the time for which you could keep the products for me. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Sukhman
Dear sir/madam,

I am writing this letter to
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get
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some
information regarding electronics
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goods
I would like to
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buy
from your shop.

I
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live
in the green city which is on the outskirts of your town. As I am looking forward to purchasing a laptop and a printer, I remembered the ad of your shop in the newspaper. I want to know whether you take orders in advance and if
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so
how much time
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before
I
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have to
place an order. I would
also
like to know about the charges of the home delivery option if provided.

Further
, if you can provide me with
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some
information about the brands of the products I can
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buy
from you, would be
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very
useful.
Moreover
, I need the prices of
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different
laptops and printers you sell at your showroom.
Lastly
, it would be
really
kind of you to
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tell
me the time for which you could
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keep
the products for me.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Sukhman
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IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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