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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. You should write at least 150 words.

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. gg5l
Hi John, I am Navjot and I am one of your regular customer. I always got satisfied product and services from your shop, that's why I am thinking to buy one study lamp from your shop. In this letter I am going to describe the features those I need in that lamp. Firstly, I would like to know if you have any appropriate lamp according to my needs. The size of lamp should be 20 inches and there should be option for day light and night mode. The light qaulity should be good in this and it should be chargeable and portable. So that we can move it easily and there should be batterey problem. If you have any lamp matching these features or similar to this, then please let me know and i would also like to know the price of this. Here is one more thing can I order this lamp directly from you or from the website. In case you have any lamp meeting my requirements, I would really appreciate if you can hold one for me. Thank you, I look forward hearing from you. Your faithfully, Navjoy
Hi John,

I am
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Navjot and
I am one of your regular customer. I always
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got
satisfied product and services from your shop, that's why I am thinking to
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buy
one study
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lamp
from your shop. In this letter I am going to
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describe
the features those I need in that lamp.

Firstly
, I would like to know if you have any appropriate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lamp
according to my needs. The size of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lamp
should be
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20 inches
and there should be option for day light and night mode. The light
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qaulity
should be
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good
in this and it should be chargeable and portable.
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So
that we can
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move
it
easily
and there should be
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batterey
problem.

If you have any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lamp
matching these features or similar to this, then
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please
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let
me know and
Did you mean "I"?
i
would
also
like to know the price of this. Here is one more thing can I order this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lamp
directly
from you or from the website. In case you have any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lamp
meeting my requirements, I would
really
appreciate if you can hold one for me. Thank you, I look forward hearing from you.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,

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Navjoy
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IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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