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You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Congratulate him/her for also being accepted Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together.

You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Congratulate him/her for also being accepted Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together. rrLL
Hello Mohit, I hope this letter finds you in Radiant health and In good spirit. The purpose of this letter is to congratulate you on your selection to Paris institute of technology, France. With immense happiness i like to inform you that got selected in the same college. Our hard work payed us well. Is it fine if we share the accommodation. we are from same culture it will be easy for us to understand each other more over we will jell up well. On the other hand some of our first year subjects are common hence can study together. we will have a lot of advantage of staying together. on weekends we can go on trips or go some place to eat, May be explore the campus. I hope we have a wonder full college time there. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Lovingly
Hello
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Mohit
, I hope this letter finds you in Radiant health and In
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good
spirit. The purpose of this letter is to congratulate you on your selection to Paris institute of technology, France. With immense happiness
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
like to inform you that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
selected in the same college. Our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work
Only in a nautical context 'payed' is an acceptable past tense form of 'pay'. Please check!
payed
us well. Is it fine if we share the accommodation.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
we
are from same culture it will be easy for us to understand each other more over we will jell up well.
On the other hand
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of our
first
year subjects are common
hence
can study together.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
we
will have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
advantage of staying together.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
on
The comma is probably missing here: "weekends, we".
weekends we
can go on trips or go
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
place to eat, May be
Consider using a past participle here: "explored".
explore
the campus. I hope we have a wonder full college time there. Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Lovingly

IELTS letter You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Congratulate him/her for also being accepted Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
145 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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