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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them.Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods. Write at least 150 words.

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods. JMMD
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter regarding the purchase of some essential electronic gadgets that I have been searching for almost a month. I am a resident of Frazer town and planning to move here, to Amesbury soon. Construction is in progress and I have been looking for a reliable source to place my order since March, but failed to obtain what I am seeking for. I would need an 8 way distribution board and an electron micro controller. I would also need 30 16A Opale coke grey switches and 15 10A classic white multi pin universal sockets. It would be grateful if you could retain them for me, if available. If you can get me the estimate of these items, I can pay in advance. I need to know how long you will be able to hold these items in case they are in stock. In the eventuality that you do not have them, I wish to know whether or not you will be in a position to order them for me. I look forward for a prompt reply. Yours sincerely, Tony Hiddleton
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding the
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purchase
of
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some
essential electronic gadgets that I have been searching for almost a month.

I am a resident of
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Frazer
town and planning to
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move
here, to Amesbury
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Construction is in progress and I have been looking for a reliable source to place my order since March,
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but
failed to obtain what I am seeking for.

I would need an 8 way distribution board and an electron micro controller. I would
also
need 30 16A
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Opale
coke
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grey
switches and 15 10A classic white multi pin universal sockets. It would be grateful if you could retain them for me, if available.

If you can
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get
me the estimate of these items, I can pay in advance. I need to know how long you will be able to hold these items in case they are in stock. In the eventuality that you do not have them, I wish to know
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
whether or not
you will be in a position to order them for me.

I look forward for a prompt reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

Tony
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Hiddleton

IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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