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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: Introduce yourself Explain what experience and special skills you have Explain why you are interested in the job

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: Introduce yourself Explain what experience and special skills you have Explain why you are interested in the job jXXw
Dear Sir/Madam, This is to inform you that, I have come across an advertisement in the English newspaper for a job in the City Museum shop during the summer vacations and I am very excited to join in your shop. In this connection, I would like to introduce myself. I have done my under graduation in commerce and I have 3 years professional experience in various fields like hotels, hypermarkets and hospitals. Even I have worked in an orphanage for my own interest to extend my professional skills. I have mainly worked as a chartered accountant and besides that I have voluntarily worked in an orphanage as a food organiser. Even I have tried my skills in computer basics like Microsoft Offices and latest online activities. As a result, I am comfortable in multitasking in various field. As I have been already mentioned that I have various skills in various fields, I would like to enhance my skills in this new filed like museum. It would really help me in developing my potential skill as well. Also, from my beginning of my college itself, I was very keen about your museum and would like to work for someday. I would like to request you to kindly consider my candidature and offer me an opportunity accordingly. Yours faithfully, Yasir Alam
Dear Sir/Madam,

This is to inform you that, I have
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come
across an advertisement in the English newspaper for a job in the City Museum shop during the summer
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vacations and
I am
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very
excited to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
in your shop.

In this connection, I would like to introduce myself. I have done my under graduation in commerce and I have 3 years professional experience in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
fields like hotels, hypermarkets and hospitals. Even I have worked in an orphanage for my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
interest to extend my professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

I have
mainly
worked as a chartered accountant and
besides
that I have
voluntarily
worked in an orphanage as a food
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organiser
. Even I have tried my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in computer basics like Microsoft Offices and latest online activities.
As a result
, I am comfortable in multitasking in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
field.

As I have been already mentioned that I have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
various
fields, I would like to enhance my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in this new filed like museum. It would
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in developing my potential
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
as well
.
Also
, from my beginning of my college itself, I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
keen about your museum and would like to work for someday.

I would like to request you to kindly consider my candidature and offer me an opportunity
accordingly
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Yasir
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Alam
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: Introduce yourself Explain what experience and special skills you have Explain why you are interested in the job

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