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You would like a pen friend in a different country. You've just read Marysa's post on a website. Write her an email of about 100 words. Use appropriate greeting and ending phrases. Give information about yourself (age, family, where you live, etc). Ask Marysa about her life and interests. Describe your hobbies and your favorite free time activities.

You would like a pen friend in a different country. You've just read Marysa's post on a website. Write her an email of about 100 words. Use appropriate greeting and ending phrases. Give information about yourself (age, family, where you live, etc). Ask Marysa about her life and interests. Describe your hobbies and your favorite free time activities. WgKRq
Dear Marysa, I’m Su from Myanmar. I’m twenty seven years old and a Burmese. I work as an accountant. There are six family members including me in my family. I’ve two older brothers and one younger sister. One of my elder brothers is a mechanical engineer and works in an Oil & Gas company. And the other opens a motorcycle workshop. My younger sister also works as an accountant for a service company. Now I live with my family in Yangon, which is one of my favourite cities in Myanmar and is my hometown too. Who do you live with? How many family members do you have? And what are your typical school days like? What subject do you like most? And then what are you interested in? For me I like cooking in my free time. So I often cook for my family on my holidays. Do you like cooking? I enjoy watching movies and really love listening to music, especially Ed Sheeran songs. Do you know Ed Sheeran? I like his songs very much and he’s good at writing songs too. That’s why I think he’s great at everything he makes. Moreover, doing exercise is also one of my favourite activities in my free time that makes me feel fresh both my mind and body. Are you interested in doing exercise? What sport do you like most? What activity do you like to do in your free time? If you have free time, email me and see you soon. Regards Su
Dear
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Marysa
,

I’m
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Su
from Myanmar. I’m
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twenty seven
years
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old
and a Burmese.
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I
work as an accountant. There are six
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family
members including me in my
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family
. I’ve two older brothers and one younger sister. One of my elder brothers is a mechanical engineer and works in an Oil & Gas
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company
. And the other opens a motorcycle workshop. My younger sister
also
works as an accountant for a service
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company
.
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Now
I
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live
with my
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family
in Yangon, which is one of my
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favourite
cities in Myanmar and is my hometown too.

Who do you
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live
with? How
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many
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family
members do you have? And what are your typical school days like? What subject do you like most? And then what are you interested in?

For me I like cooking in my
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free
time.
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So
I
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often
cook for my
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family
on my holidays. Do you like cooking? I enjoy watching movies and
really
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love
listening to music,
especially
Ed Sheeran songs. Do you know Ed Sheeran? I like his songs
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very
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much and
he’s
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good
at writing songs too. That’s why I
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think
he’s great at everything he
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makes
.
Moreover
, doing exercise is
also
one of my
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favourite
activities in my
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free
time that
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makes
me feel fresh both my mind and body. Are you interested in doing exercise? What sport do you like most? What activity do you like to do in your
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free
time?

If you have
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free
time, email me and
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see
you
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soon
.

Regards

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Su
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IELTS letter You would like a pen friend in a different country. You've just read Marysa's post on a website. Write her an email of about 100 words. Use appropriate greeting and ending phrases. Give information about yourself (age, family, where you live, etc). Ask Marysa about her life and interests. Describe your hobbies and your favorite free time activities.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
252 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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