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You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the health problem • explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office • suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office

You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the health problem • explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office • suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office lje3b
Dear Mr Lalit, I am writing it to put your attention to the working scenario of our premise owing to the fact I have recently been suffering from a restless routine, causing health issues by them. Looking at, the health problems being unbearable day by day to me. I got shoulder dislocates due to sitting long hours. I am unable to sit properly and the doctor advises me to take bed rest completely. However, I am solely an income source for my home and children, I cannot stop working. Actually, working more than 8 hours is not favour of the human body, even though, laws also explained about the rules of spell at the work station. Since our duty period expanded, all the employees are enduring enormous arthritis pain. Therefore, I would like to suggest to you that doing duties after overtime should not apply, all need to finish their daily responsibilities before the deadline period. In addition, I discussed with the co-fellow, they all want a mini gym outside of the organization which can be used at break time. It could really help us to maintain our physique. I would be grateful to consider our all concerns and hoping to hear a beneficial response in the future. Yours Obediently,
Dear Mr
Lalit
,

I am writing it to put your attention to the working scenario of our premise owing to the fact I have recently been suffering from a restless routine, causing health issues by them.

Looking at, the health problems being unbearable day by day to me. I
got
shoulder dislocates due to sitting long hours. I am unable to sit
properly
and the doctor advises me to take bed rest completely.
However
, I am
solely
an income source for my home and children, I cannot
stop
working.

Actually, working more than 8 hours is not
favour
of the human body,
even though
, laws
also
explained
about the
rules
of spell at the work station. Since our duty period expanded, all the employees are enduring enormous arthritis pain.

Therefore
, I would like to suggest to you that doing duties after overtime should not apply, all need to finish their daily responsibilities
before
the deadline period.
In addition
, I discussed with the co-fellow, they all want a mini gym
outside of
the organization which can be
used
at break time. It could
really
help
us to maintain our physique.

I would be grateful to consider our all concerns and hoping to hear a beneficial response in the future.

Yours
Obediently
,
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IELTS letter You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the health problem • explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office • suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office

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  American English
7 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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