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You work in an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. WAL to your manager. In your letter: state why you want to work in the company's heas office for 6 months, say how your work can be done when you are away, ask for his/ her help in arranging it

You work in an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. WAL to your manager. In your letter: state why you want to work in the company's heas office for 6 months, say how your work can be done when you are away, ask for his/ her help in arranging it pR6ja
Respected sir, I Gurneet Kaur, working in your company is writing this letter to request you to send me to the international head office for 6 months. I am keen to learn from this internal exposure and I believe that it will bring growth to my work. Just to state that I have planned everything accordingly, my friend and collegue Maya will look after my work here while I am gone and I will also coordinate with everybody wherever there is help needed. I would be very grateful to you if you help me arrange this as this can bring a huge impact on my work. I believe that this will bring progess in my professional life that in an indirect way will benefit you. I would be very thankful to you if you grant me such an opportunity and will look forward to show you my growth. Yours thankfully, Gurneet Kaur.
Respected sir,

I
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Gurneet
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Kaur
, working in your
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company
is writing this letter to request you to
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send
me to the international head office for 6 months.

I am keen to learn from this internal exposure and I believe that it will bring growth to my work.
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Just
to state that I have planned everything
accordingly
, my friend and
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collegue
Maya will look after my work here while I
am gone
and I will
also
coordinate with everybody wherever there is
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help
needed. I would be
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very
grateful to you if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me arrange this as this can bring a huge impact on my work. I believe that this will bring
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progess
in my professional life that
Consider replacing "in an indirect way" with the adverb for "indirect"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an indirect way
will benefit you.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would be
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very
thankful to you if you grant me such an opportunity and will look forward to
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show
you my growth.

Yours
thankfully
,

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Gurneet
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Kaur
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IELTS letter You work in an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. WAL to your manager. In your letter: state why you want to work in the company's heas office for 6 months, say how your work can be done when you are away, ask for his/ her help in arranging it

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  American English
5 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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