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ou recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

ou recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it r8ejJ
Dear Colleagues, Hope you all doing well! I am writing this mail to remind all of you that it's been exactly a year today when you came to my birthday party at my place and also want to express my gratitude for the gift you gave. As you know very well that It is my birthday, I have been receiving a plethora of wishing messages from you since morning. During the lockdown, I am not able to invite you all; although I would like to recall all of them about the celebration we had last year. Specially, you brought an expensive wristwatch and a photo card for me. Therefore, I want to say again a deep thankyou from my heart. It was a big surprise for me by you all. Still, I have been wearing that watch and caring that picture card that includes the portrait of our group. However, I got homogenous compliments from others and I am going to use them in my future. Card, I was thinking to frame it so it could not destroy. At last, thanks once again to remind me of those amusing moments. I hope to see you all again after the lockdown over. Yours faithfully,
Dear Colleagues,

Hope you all doing well! I am writing this mail to remind all of you that it's been exactly a year
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when you came to my birthday party at my place and
also
want to express my gratitude for the gift you gave.

As you know
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very
well that It is my birthday, I have been receiving a plethora of wishing messages from you since morning. During the lockdown, I am not able to invite you all; although I would like to recall all of them about the celebration we had last year.
Specially
, you brought an expensive wristwatch and a photo card for me.

Therefore
, I want to say again a deep
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thankyou
from my heart. It was a
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big
surprise for me by you all.
Still
, I have been wearing that
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watch
and caring that picture card that includes the portrait of our group.

However
, I
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got
homogenous compliments from
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others and
I am going to
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use
them in my future. Card, I was thinking to frame it
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so
it could not
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destroy
. At last, thanks once again to remind me of those amusing moments.

I hope to
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see
you all again after the lockdown over.

Yours
faithfully
,

IELTS letter ou recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

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