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You work in a corporate office, and you are keen to be promoted. You employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department.

You work in a corporate office, and you are keen to be promoted. You employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department. m1WQL
Dear Sir, I am Jignesh Patel. I have been working with your organization as a Design engineer for last 5 year. I heard about internal vacancies on hire position relevant to my department so, I would like to request you to consider my name for the same. I believe that for this post I have appropriate all qualities and experience. I have been working different types of project also have worked in very versatile and critical. Situation. I have been working for long time consequence I very well aware about work culture and system of work process. I know employees so, I can easily coordinate and understand each other. Relevant to my soft skill, I am a very good team member and good at managing people. My work strength and knowledge definitely helps to achieve our company goal also I have past experience so it is beneficial to improve our work quality. If I get chance, Believe me you will definitely satisfied with my work. Your faithfully, Jignesh Patel
Dear Sir,

I am
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Jignesh
Patel. I have been working with your organization as a Design engineer for last 5 year.
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I
heard about internal vacancies on hire position relevant to my department
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so
, I would like to request you to consider my name for the same.

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I
believe that for this post I have
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appropriate
all qualities and experience.
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I
have been working
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different
types of project
also
have worked in
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very
versatile and critical. Situation.
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I
have been working for long time consequence I
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very
well aware about
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work
culture and system of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
process.
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I
know employees
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so
, I can
easily
coordinate and understand each other.

Relevant to my soft
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skill
, I am a
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very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
team member and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at managing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. My
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work
strength and knowledge definitely
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helps
to achieve our
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company
goal
also
I have
Consider using "experience".
past experience
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so
it is beneficial to
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improve
our
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work
quality.

If I
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get
chance, Believe me you will definitely
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "satisfy"
satisfied
with my work.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,

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Jignesh
Patel
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IELTS letter You work in a corporate office, and you are keen to be promoted. You employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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