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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job Write at least 150 words.

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job knWW
Dear Sir, My name is Lily James and I am working in the mineral resources department of your company. Recently I came across an advertisement for a course on a global level and thought it might be beneficial if I were to attend it. The course is called '' Mineral resources and economic development'', therefore it provides extended knowledge moreover skills around the financial field of the inorganic materials. These lessons provide a thorough study in exploiting rocks and changing their value to potentially use them for industrial advantage. The company could provide me, if possible a two week licence from 4th to 18th of November in order to participate in these seminars. Aidan Turner, a colleague of mine, is eager to take on any of my work responsibilities during that period. In addition to his kind effort, he will be informing me and working with me during the weekends so that my tasks are delivered on schedule. Also, I have to underline the importance of my attendance to the cource. It will enchance my Knowledge in our field and cultivate my skills, as well as provide me with an amount of tools to apply in work and improve our overal performance. Thank you in advance for your time and effort and i hope you will consider authorising me with a licence. Yours sincerely, Lily James
Dear Sir, My name is Lily
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James and
I am working in the mineral resources department of your
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company
. Recently I came across an advertisement for a course on a global level and
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thought
it might be beneficial if I were to attend it.

The course
is called
'' Mineral resources and economic development'',
therefore
it
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provides
extended knowledge
moreover
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skills
around the financial field of the inorganic materials. These lessons
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provide
a thorough study in exploiting rocks and changing their value to
potentially
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use
them for industrial advantage.

The
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company
could
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provide
me, if possible a
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two week
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licence
from 4th to 18th of November in order to participate in these seminars. Aidan Turner, a colleague of mine, is eager to take on any of my work responsibilities during that period.
In addition
to his kind effort, he will be informing me and working with me during the weekends
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so
that my tasks
are delivered
on schedule.

Also
, I
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have to
underline the importance of my attendance to the
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cource
. It will
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enchance
my Knowledge in our field and cultivate my
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skills
,
as well
as
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provide
me with an amount of tools to apply in work and
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improve
our
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overal
performance.

Thank you in advance for your time and effort and
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i
hope you will consider
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authorising
me with a
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licence
. Yours
sincerely
, Lily
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James
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IELTS letter You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job

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5 paragraphs
225 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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